Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Psychological need satisfaction and body image

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Great work Brydie! I think your Figure 1 is excellent. Suggestion: maybe using the DSM-5 to help define the Mental disorders will be beneficial for you as your chapter progresses! I look forward to seeing the final chapter once its completed! --Maddkilby (discuss • contribs) 22:10, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, awesome topic you've picked! One comment I would make is to consider putting empirical data in your mental disorders section to explore help reflect the extent of the problem. --BMPENFOLD (discuss • contribs) 03:24, 13 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi i would just like to link you a paper I have used previously in another unit that may be helpfulǃ When feeling attractive matters too much to women: A processunderpinning the relation between psychological need satisfaction and unhealthy weight control behaviors - Thanks u31149665 (social contrib. 20th October)

Great book chapter! suggestion would be adding in a few more external links that relate to topic a bit more. A good one I found that talk about body image in context in psychological need satisfaction. https://www.mentalhealth.org.uk/publications/body-image-report/exec-summary. --U3187314 (discuss • contribs) 01:34, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:27, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Good Capitalisation of the title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created, with basic description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect link to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Under developed 2-level heading structure - lacks disciplined focus on address the question in the sub-title. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Some development for some sections; minimal or missing for other sections. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Excellent External links Lacks direct relevance to topic

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:27, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient chapter. The Overview could be improved by adding a case study. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits]. Theory The chapter doesn't present a sufficient description of how psychological needs may influence body image based on the best and most relevant psychological theory. It is unclear why this chapter goes beyond SDT as a theoretical framework. SDT would be quite sufficient as it is the main contemporary theory about psychological needs and can be readily applied to analysing its effects on body image. There is too much general description of background theory and too little application of psychological need theory to body image. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research to inform its understand of the relationship between psychological needs and body image. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is basic, with some repeated errors. Mostly the issue is that the chapter is light-weight and too brief. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. Basic use of tables. Figures 1 and 2 should be re-captioned as tables. Very good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Basic use of a case study. To improve, tailor the case study to the topic (i.e., the relationship between psychological needs and body image). Grammar Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). APA style Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., Figure 1 rather than figure 1). Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. Check and correct use of author initials. See new doi format. Social contribution ~7 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:45, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. This presentation makes effective use of Powtoon animation. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title but not the sub-title are used in the video title and opening slide - the sub-title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Video recording quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:45, 17 November 2019 (UTC)