Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Psychological flexibility and emotional health

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Remove or adapt generic headings from the template. Reasonably well developed 2-level heading structure Key points Remove or adapt generic template content. I recommend making greater use of ACT theory. Key points are reasonably well developed in earlier sections, but less so towards the end. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image Try to identify images that are more directly relevant to the target topic. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Excellent Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:28, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Awesome topic! The literature on psychological flexibility is fascinating. There are some really cool techniques for improving psychological flexibility that I've recently come across as I've read more about ACT. Specifically, cognitive diffusion and urge surfing I think are really cool, and I think it would be interesting to investigate how these relate to emotional change. A book which outlines some of these really well is "Get Out of Your Mind and Into your Life by Steve Hayes; one of the originators of Acceptance and Commitment Therapy. Good luck with your chapter! --Joshgrain (discuss • contribs) 03:29, 16 October 2019 (UTC)

Comment

This seems like a really interesting topic to be writing about. Perhaps place your focus questions in a feature box to help them stand out and make more of an important impression in what you are wanting to get across to the reader. Great work! --U3158296 (discuss • contribs) 23:58, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid, sufficient chapter. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is discussed. Perhaps more unpacking of what PF is could be useful, but the key elements are described. Reasonably good coverage of relevant theoretical interventions, including ACT. Research Relevant research is described in broad terms. It could be discussed in more detail in relation to PF (e.g., which parts of PF are most impacted by which types of intervention?). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[1]. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of images. Excellent use of tables. Excellent use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Figures and tables are excellent. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Select up to a maximum top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~5 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:47, 20 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good, if somewhat basic presentation. This presentation makes use of simple tools. Structure and content Only 4 of the 6 elements of PF are mentioned? These elements could be described in more detail. Excellent use of citations. Address an international audience (e.g., Lifeline contact details are only relevant to those in Australia). The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Consider adding a case study or more examples. Communication The presentation uses text and image based slides with narrated audio. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality Consider communicating the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK, but a bit quiet - review microphone set-up. Visual display quality was reasonably good. Image sources are acknowledged, but not their copyright status. Are these images licensed for re-use? If not, remove the presentation because it may have violated copyright restrictions . A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:00, 20 November 2019 (UTC)