Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Positive education

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:54, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Title/subtitle content and formatting has been corrected User page Created, with description about self No link to book chapter - now added Social contribution 1 contribution claimed, but no direct link to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Use correct APA style for citations (e.g., no author initials) Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style . Caption does not use APA style. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Good See suggested reformatting

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:54, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Hi, Here is a suggestion for you book chapter that you might find of interest, it discusses 'multiple intelligences' I have provided a link for further reading, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Theory_of_multiple_intelligences. Good luck with your book chapter--U3151962 (discuss • contribs) 08:26, 12 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this a promising chapter. Strengths include the applied example and practical exercises. Areas for improvement include the review of research, level of detail at the beginning and end, and redrafting/proofreading. The Overview and Conclusion are underdeveloped. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Basic but sufficient coverage of theory involving the relation between the target constructs is provided. Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of theory. The Reeve (2018) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Some useful research is identified and discussed, but I'm not convinced that this chapter provides a comprehensive review of relevant research (e.g., https://search.informit.com.au/fullText;dn=876602060771502;res=IELHSS). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is a bit untidy - it could do with redrafting and better proofreading. Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. I've added the 2nd level of headings. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Learning features No use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. No use of tables. No use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Excellent use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Abbreviations Check and correct grammatical formatting for abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Do not include author initials. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of italicisation. Add spaces between author initials. Social contribution ~1 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:52, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic, but reasonably good presentation. This presentation makes use of simple tools. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. Theory-rich; not much research. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is easy to follow. Check and correct pronunciation of "Seligman". Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it reasonably easy to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Address an international audience - provide context for Geelong Grammar example. Production quality The chapter title and part of the sub-title are used in the video title. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was good. Video display and recording quality were good. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:28, 17 November 2019 (UTC)