Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Motivation to overcome substance use addiction

Comment

Hi there, good start to your page! I noticed that you are yet to fill in your case study section. I found a case study that might interest you about a drug addict. Hopefully you could use this as your case study in your chapter or give you a insight into the type of case studies that are available on your topic. Follow this link to the pdf of the case study:https://medcraveonline.com/JPCPY/JPCPY-09-00504.pdf. Hope this helps, good luck. U3175650 (discuss • contribs) 11:33, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Capitalisation and style of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents and book chapter style User page Created, with description about self and external link to book chapter (changed to internal) Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Use default heading styles See earlier comment about Heading casing. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Remove or adapt generic template content. Write for an international audience. A specific country could be used for a case study. Be more selective about which theoretical perspectives to focus on and make more extensive use of those theories. Basic development of key points for some sections, with little citation. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Not all references have been cited. Resources See also Excellent External links None

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. This chapter is well under the maximum word count. The Overview is underdeveloped; consider adding focus questions and a case study. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). A cook's tour of general motivational theory is applied to motivation to recover from substance addiction. Some of this is useful. Greater use of more specific theory would enhance the theoretical substance. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research, relying mainly on describing a single study towards the end. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written but lacks spit and polish; it reads like an early draft. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing. The chapter uses a basic 1-level structure; consider building out to a 2-level structure. Learning features No use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Problematic use of images - two copyrighted images were uploaded and have been removed. Basic use of feature boxes. No use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. See new doi format. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:14, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an insufficient presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Structure and content Too much general background; just focus on one thing: answering the question (in the sub-title). Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. There is too much content, in too much detail, presented within the allocated time frame. Zoom out and provide a higher-level presentation at a slower pace. It is best to do a small amount well than a large amount poorly. Communication The presentation is tedious. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality Basic. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK. Video recording quality was OK. A copyright license for the presentation not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter was not provided (now added). A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:23, 17 November 2019 (UTC)

Comment

Hello! There body of work you have was there, I've just gone through and helped edit some spelling and grammatical mistakes. I have also added some images to help add clarity, as well as a few external links that add some more information. There needs to be some more work done on explaining each theory, with credible sources listed for reference. The statistics also need a reference, and perhaps a more international range to show how global the issue is. Otherwise, I've done some layout reformatting for ease of reading, with the information you already had. Good work! --U3160224 (discuss • contribs) 02:54, 20 August 2020 (UTC)

PRIME motivation theory of addiction

The PRIME theory by West and Brown posits that addiction is a failure in one or more of the dimensions of motivation and might be very useful to this topic- here's the reference for their book: West, R. & Brown, J. (2013). Theory of Addiction (2nd ed). John Wiley & Sons, Ltd. --Anubhandary (discuss • contribs) 12:29, 16 October 2020 (UTC)