Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Life satisfaction

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Hey, You may want to add a section about cross cultural differences in life satisfaction e.g. in relation to what are predictors, self-esteem etc. Below some links to studies that might be interesting: https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/01461672992511006?journalCode=pspc https://journals.sagepub.com/doi/abs/10.1177/0022022105275961?journalCode=jcca https://link.springer.com/chapter/10.1007/978-90-481-2352-0_4. Good luck :)--U3182366 (discusscontribs) 14:31, 18 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Wasn't provided; now added

User page

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  1. Basic
  2. Provide a link to the chapter you are working on

Social contribution

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  1. None summarised on user page

Section headings

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  1. None provided

Key points

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  1. Insufficient

Image

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References

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  1. Three required for topic development requirements
  2. Use APA style
  3. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Comments

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Your topic is one of the things that we may take for granted. We often do not really think of what can satisfy our needs? our purpose? our Life? This is such a good topic in a discussion--as we all know, we have different personalities (which you are going to discuss) that can influence us how we consider as the satisfaction of Life. I am interested to know of any studies that can actually discuss some cultural aspects of satisfaction of life. Take a look at this reading, this may help you start with your conclusion: https://www.cambridge.org/core/journals/twin-research-and-human-genetics/article/personality-polygenes-positive-affect-and-life-satisfaction/4DB2BE673BF122FB9A0AF2147EED80C0/core-reader U3165244

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 20 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a promising, but fairly basic chapter.
  2. Overview - consider building on the sub-title by presenting focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure.
  3. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended.
  4. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Promising approach to discussion of ingredients, but I think the selection of ingredients could be improved. For example, health could be considered.
  2. The second half of the section about personality wasn't about personality.
  3. Self-esteem: It is unclear whether it is being argued that SE causes LS, or vice-versa, or whether they are just correlated. Clarify. Note the Reeve (2018) critique that SE doesn't predict much (cf [1]).
  4. Culture: This section could be renamed "social support" or "social engagement" and re-written to reflect this focus, since it is one of the major contributors to LS.
  5. Discussion of relevant theories is embedded within the research-focused description of the different predictors of LS. More stand-alone emphasis could be placed on the LS itself.
  1. Several useful studies are mentioned.
  2. Several claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the [factual?] tags).
  3. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good.
    2. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective[[2]].
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
  2. Learning features
    1. Basic use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Very basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. No use of case studies or examples.
  3. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[3] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  4. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  5. APA style
    1. Figures and tables
      1. Refer to each Table and Figure at least once within the main text (e.g., see Figure 1).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
      2. Do not include author initials.
      3. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      4. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.
  1. ~6 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:23, 20 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon animation.
  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is very well structured, with a clear Overview and Conclusion.
  3. Comments about the book chapter regarding refinement of the factors also apply to the presentation.
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. Audio recording quality was good, but there was some white noise - possibly an on-board microphone was used. Consider using an external microphone.
  2. Visual display quality was excellent.
  3. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:35, 20 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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