Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Hope and emotion

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Hi there,

I was just having a look at your topic development for your chapter hope and emotion since I am researching a similar topic. I noticed that your assignment does not have any content or sub-headings related to what you are planning to write about. There is an example posted on canvas as to what the topic development should look like, you are also welcome to have a look at mine (hope and motivation). I am not sure if you have a separate document of your chapter structure elsewhere I just thought I should let you know.

I hope you are having a lovely weekend, if you need any help let me know :)

Kind Regards,

Julia

I know it's coming close to the due date but particularly the section what is hope could use some more flushing out so that people understand what it is.--Haylzw (discuss • contribs) 06:32, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title OK Sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created, with description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with direct links to evidence. Section headings The structure does not focus on directly addressing the question about the role of hope in our emotional lives. Well developed 2-level heading structure. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Dictionary definitions are weak for a summary of academic theory and research. Partial development of key points. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author initials). Write using 3rd person perspective. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style.. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Only two provided; not in APA style. For full APA style: Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources OK

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:37, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does a good job of reviewing hope theory and research about its psychological consequences, but struggles to narrow in more specifically on the relationship between hope and emotion. Overview - Consider adding focus questions - doing so could help to refine the focus of the chapter to more closely align with the chapter title and sub-title. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is room for further consideration of the theoretical relationships between hope and emotion. Research Several relevant research studies are described, one by one. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit less detail about the methodology (e.g., we don't need to know the average age of participants down to the second decimal point), but provide more info about the size of effects or relationships. When reviewing research literature, consider providing a synthesis of several related studies rather than detailed descriptions of one study at a time, unless the study is particularly pertinent (e.g., on hope and emotion). Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Addressing the topic development feedback could have helped to improve this chapter. Layout The chapter uses a simple, effective structure. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. Figure 2 is excellent. Basic use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Basic use of case study. The case study could have been followed up to demonstrate application of theory and research. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals')[1]. APA style Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics; capitalise the first letter of Figure and Table; no full-stop). Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. For example: See new doi format. Social contribution ~1 minor, logged social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:32, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. This presentation uses simple tools. Structure and content The presentation is well structured. Well selected content - not too much or too little. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s) but could be improved by making these take-home messages more practical and useful. Communication Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented by images. A small number of slides are used; using more slides could improve the visual engagement. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Image sources are not provided. Image copyright status (in general) is provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:09, 17 November 2019 (UTC)