Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Factitious disorder and malingering motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:38, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

@Demimimimi: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:42, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Accurate title A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section. User page Created, with description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence Section headings Overly complex, 3-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about the disorder). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title (i.e., the motivation behind FD/malingering and what can be done about it). Key points Uneven development - a lot of content in some sections and a lack of content in other sections. Appears to be planning an overly clinical/psychopathological approach, rather than a motivation theory and research approach Overview - Consider adding focus questions Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image Provided, with an APA style caption (except replace colon with period) Consider increasing image size from default (to make it easier to read) Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References No peer reviewed sources cited :( Use APA style, including active hyperlinks Resources See also 1 provided External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:16, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. The Overview could be abbreviated. Consider adding focus questions to the Overview. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is too much general descriptive material about the disorders (leading to the chapter being over the maximum word count). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Use internal rather than external links in "See also" for other book chapters. Add an external links section. Learning features No use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. Some uploaded images were deleted for copyright infringement. No use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. No use of quizzes. Excellent use of case studies or examples. Grammar Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1]. Abbreviations Abbreviations (such as e.g., i.e.., etc.) should only be used inside parentheses. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure. References are not in full APA style. For example: A mixture of referencing styles are used; adopt one and use it consistently. See new doi format. Social contribution No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:37, 12 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising presentation, with very interesting content. The presentation could be improved by covering less material more slowly. This presentation makes use of simple tools. Structure and content Fast-paced - be more selective about what to cover. The presentation is reasonably well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Excellent coverage of relevant research. A Conclusion slide is presented briefly but there is no narration. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Communication The presentation is interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides with narrated audio. Slow down. Leave longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was basic. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:33, 19 November 2019 (UTC)