Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Entrepreneurship motivation

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:10, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably useful chapter which overviews several motivational theories in relation to entrepreneurship. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Conclusion, which is somewhat vague and doesn't really address the the focus questions. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits. Theory Several relevant theories are described. Perhaps the chapter could be strengthened by using fewer theories in more depth. Research Some relevant research is discussed in relation to theory. This could be more indepth. The case studies are based on research studies, which adds depth. However, this means that there are no case studies of real world examples (e.g., entrepreneurship stories of success and failure which illustrate theories in action). When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Some claims are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is good. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience (e.g., see External links). Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. See earlier comments about heading casing. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features No use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. Very good use of case studies or examples. Use bullet-points for See also and External links, per Tutorial 1. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). APA style Citations do not use correct APA style. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~4 basic edits involving adding links to past book chapters

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:10, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. This presentation makes effective use of PowToon animation. Structure and content The content is quite comprehensive and well selected. A case study could be helpful. Note that an entrepreneur doesn't necessarily start a "business" (e.g., social entrepreneurs). So, motives may also include social and/or environmental goals, not just self-benefit. "More likely" is relative; so, "more likely" than who? The presentation is well structured. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated slides with narrated audio. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good. Visual display quality was excellent. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:31, 12 February 2020 (UTC)