Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Criminal record stigma and emotion

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Hello, this looks to be a really interesting topic and from what you've done already I'm sure it will be great when you're done. Here's a link to a group of other chapters discussing 'stigma' that i think you could find useful. https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Category:Motivation_and_emotion/Book/Stigma.U3176958 (discuss • contribs) 08:11, 2 September 2019 (UTC)

Hey, I just added and formatted the title how it should be. Kunal :)--Kunal Kumar - University of Canberra (discuss • contribs) 09:19, 4 September 2018 (UTC)

Hey, you could relate stereotypes as one of the causes of this stigma. There is plenty of research of how stigmas can be caused by stereotypes --U3158984 (discuss • contribs) 05:29, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I have added a relevant image and caption to your book chapter. Hopefully this helps. Thanks, --U3154928 (discuss • contribs) 05:48, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

Hello, this looks very interesting! I am doing a similar book chapter looking at self-stigma. Might be wroth a mention in your book chapter - check out this journal article which looks at the theoretical model of self stigma: The self-stigma process in criminal offenders by Moore, K., Tangney, J., & Stuewig, J. (2016). Good luck! --Maddiebunday (discuss • contribs) 01:04, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

User 3178428 only started adding their edits on this book chapter topic on Saturday 31st August 2019, A student from last year had this topic beforehand but dropped out before finishing.

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Title and sub-title both needed corrected; now done User page Not created Social contribution None summarised on user page Section headings Basic, 1-level structure suggested; I've added some additional standard sections Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections Key points None provided Image Image not displaying References Minimum of 3 required for the topic development Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Added video and un-capitalised headings

Hello,

Just letting you know I added a youtube video in your external links section and un-capitalised the headings and sub-headings as you only need the first letter of the first word capitalised for wikiversity. The video discusses how race and a criminal record simultaneously impacts hiring opportunities.

Hope this helps!

--Ju3141393 (discuss • contribs) 00:14, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Check your facts!

28/08/2019

Hello,

Just letting you know that you should be careful with the blanket statement you made in your overview opening sentence. You should check out the Spent Convictions Act, It outlines a lot of great information that should be of great help to you! Best of luck =] https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/User:NPLeach

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution Summarised with indirect links to evidence. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Avoid dictionary definitions - use academic, peer-reviewed sources. Avoid long direct quotes - express using your own words. Fairly weak selection of general theories - consider more specific theories that may do a better job of explaining the phenomenon. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Provide journal volume details and page numbers Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:51, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Interwiki links

Hey! I really like what you have done with your chapter so far. There are some links to my chapter that i have found super interesting. I noticed you had not added in any interwiki links to your page yet so I inserted some for a few of the important terms. Once you have added to your chapter I would recommending putting some more in. Here is the link for how to do that if you need it https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Help:Interwiki_linking --U3160373 (discuss • contribs) 04:17, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic chapter, with an insufficient depth of academic referencing. Overview - Focus questions are closed; consider rephrasing as open-ended. Address an international rather an Australia audience, although Australian case studies may be used. For additional feedback, see comments below and [ these copyedits]. Theory Relevant theories are selected but are not treated with enough theoretical depth in relation to criminal record stigma. Research Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research. Many statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written, however there are several important areas which should be improved to help bring the quality towards a professional standard. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Internationalise: Write for an international, not just a domestic audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Good use of interwiki links and embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. No use of tables. Good use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Excellent use of case studies (particularly the second one). Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Check and correct use of italicisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~12 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence within the last 24 hours before chapters were due

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:59, 8 November 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Reasonably well selected content - not too much or too little. An example or case study could be helpful, to help bring the presentation to life. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Check and correct grammar (e.g., ownership apostrophes). The presentation is reasonably well structured. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages (rather than the somewhat odd concluding question - not a key focus question?). Communication The presentation is easy to follow. The presentation makes basic use of text based slides and a couple of images with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size and colour is easy to read. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was good. Video recording quality was excellent. Image copyright status are not provided - copyright may have been violated - if so, delete the presentation or rerecord with appropriate changes. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:00, 17 November 2019 (UTC)