Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Climate change anxiety

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Hey, You're topic is very interesting! Was thinking you may want to consider the current climate change debates and student strikes for a case study example in your chapter, as it it pretty relevant and a current issue. I also fixed you're references however I left the current ones in just in case you felt you did not want to change them. Good luck in these final weeks! --Cass1804 (discusscontribs) 01:59, 14 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution

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  1. Summarised with direct links to evidence.

Section headings

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  1. Under-developed, 1-level heading structure - develop further, perhaps using a 2-level structure for the largest section(s).
  2. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points

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  1. Insufficient focus on the topic (i.e., sub-title).
  2. Remove or adapt generic template content.
  3. Basic development of key points for each section
  4. Lack of theory and research.
  5. Add citations.
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  8. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  9. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image

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  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption uses APA style.
  3. Caption explains how the image connects to key points being made in the main text.
  4. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References

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  1. Weren't cited.
  2. Good.
  3. For full APA style, use:
    1. Alphabetical order
    2. Correct capitalisation
    3. Correct italicisation
    4. The new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    5. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Good
    2. Also link to relevant book chapters
  2. External links
    1. Select for an international audience

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:46, 29 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

Suggestion

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Heya, I'm not sure how you're tracking for the word limit but if you're looking for an extra little something I think it would be cool to address some of the very recent local happenings related to climate change anxiety and how these issues/events exacerbate or reduce the anxiety. Things like:

You are lucky to have such a socially relevant topic right now! --U3173480 (discusscontribs) 05:42, 10 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

--CaraDillon (discusscontribs) 03:21, 14 October 2019 (UTC)== Climate grief ==Reply

Hi! You have yourself a great topic here, very interesting and relevant to the time. Due to so many children, youth and millennials feeling increasing anxiety around the grim outlook of climate change, there's been a recent move to give this a clinical name - "climate grief". 'Climate grief' involves despair about the future of the environment, as well as strong feelings of helplessness. This is a new development in psychology, so you may or may not have heard of it. I, myself identify strongly with this term as it feels validating to be able to give such experiences a name. I've linked an interesting article by VICE below that describes climate grief well: https://www.vice.com/en_au/article/gy48d4/environmental-grief-climate-change-anxiety

hey, really good work so far. I was thinking it might be interesting to (like a picture) include Greta Thunberg's speech at UN climate action summit as an eye catcher:) might be a good way to get your reader's attention. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KAJsdgTPJpU Good luck. --U3182366 (discusscontribs) 12:38, 19 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). The chapter starts to directly addressing the topic about half-way through.
  2. Relevant theories is considered in a basic way, however there is a lack of sufficient citation.
  1. Overall, this chapter makes insufficient use of research directly related to the topic.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is basic, but sufficient.
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured.
  3. Learning features
    1. No use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Very basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. No use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    2. Check and make correct use of commas.
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals').[1].
  5. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Climate Change).
    2. Sentences should be started with a capital letter.
  6. APA style
    1. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Do not include author initials.
      2. A full stop is needed after "et al" (i.e., "et al.").
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      3. See new doi format.
  1. ~1 minor, logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:30, 13 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an insufficient presentation.
  2. Out of a maximum 3 min. presentation, there is less than 1 minute of content about CCA  , with very little, if any, theory and research directly about CCA.
  1. There is too much info about CC and anxiety as separate concepts. Instead, cut to the chase and focus on psychological theory and research about CCA and what can be done about it.
  2. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical,
  1. The presentation is minimalistic.
  2. The presentation uses text with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  6. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images.
  1. Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality is OK.
  3. Video recording quality is excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided.
  5. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  6. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  7. A very basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:21, 15 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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