Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Choice theory

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Comments

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hope your book chapter is coming along well behind the scenes - much like Myself ;) Considering you topic os on Choice theory I would like to suggest an article I have referenced in my chapter on goal choice as it may also be relevant to you. All the best

https://www-sciencedirect-com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/search/advanced?docId=10.1016%2Fj.obhdp.2018.09.002

--U3100384 (discusscontribs) 00:32, 18 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:04, 24 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. This chapter is well over the maximum word count.
  3. For additional feedback, see following comments and these copyedits.
  1. An excellent summary of Choice Theory and Reality Therapy is provided, with useful illustrative examples.
  2. A critical perspective is evident.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  1. Written expression
    1. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter.
    2. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    3. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
    4. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
    5. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    3. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections.
  3. Learning features
    1. Basic use of embedded interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive.
    2. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. Basic use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes.
    6. Very good use of quizzes.
    7. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end.
    8. Excellent use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
  5. Spelling
    1. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment).
  6. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
    3. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation.
  1. No logged social contributions

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:04, 24 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon.
  1. An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Narrate the Title slide to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  4. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  5. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation is easy to follow and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was very good - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone.
  3. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.
  4. Visual display quality was excellent.
  5. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided.
  6. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
  7. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  8. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  9. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:48, 26 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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