Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Being too happy

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:32, 29 August 2019 (UTC)

Thanks! NPLeach

Comments

This is a great plan. I think you need to add an internal link into the resources section, perhaps links to other relevant book chapters?

Thanks! fixed that. NPLeach

Comments

Hi,

Super interesting topic. Here is a useful link on how too much happiness can have negative consequences. It refers to it as the inverted 'U' https://www.researchgate.net/profile/Barry_Schwartz3/publication/258180060_Too_Much_of_a_Good_Thing_The_Challenge_and_Opportunity_of_the_Inverted_U/links/5505be650cf2d60c0e6c7fd1/Too-Much-of-a-Good-Thing-The-Challenge-and-Opportunity-of-the-Inverted-U.pdf --JaydenG3 (discuss • contribs) 10:49, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Amazing link! Only just had a chance to start reading link so doubtful it'll be included in my topic development but will for sure be including it into my finished page. Thanks. NPLeach

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence which is odd because I've seen you making plenty of contributions - make sure to document them. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about happiness per se). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Direct quotes need page numbers - or, even better, express in your own words. Use APA style for citations. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Concentrate on peer-reviewed academic sources. 1st ref should go into External links 4th ref should go into See also For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to relevant book chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:30, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development - Social contributions

On re-looking, I found some social contributions summarised on your user talk page. I moved these to your user page and tidied them up a bit. To improve, provide a summary description of the contribution and a direct link to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:59, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The chapter could be improved by reducing the general theoretical material (and reducing word count) and getting assistance with grammar and proofreading. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. The Overview is reasonably good. The focus questions can be refined - only one of them directly relates to the topic. The lack of focus here may be a contributing factor to the chapter being over the maximum word count. The Conclusion is very good. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. Theory There is too much general theoretical material. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). This applies especially to sections 2 and 3. These sections were mostly skipped for marking purposes. The first section which directly addresses the topic is "Consequences of "being too happy"". Perhaps also consider the "hedonic treadmill". Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Overall, this chapter provides a reasonable overview of relevant research. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Excellent use of interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. No use of embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters helps to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Good use of images. Good use of tables, although the table isn't necessary in terms of addressing the topic. Very good use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Except the width of the boxes. Good use of case studies or examples. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs individuals'). Spelling Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. There is excessive use of commas (e.g, none are needed for: "Adida et al., (2008),") References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~6 logged social contributions without direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:41, 11 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very likeable, fun, creative presentation. The only downside (a notable one) is that the topic ("What are the consequences of being too happy?") isn't really addressed until ~2:00. This presentation makes creative use of stop-gap animation with self-drawn images and text. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation could be improved by allocating less coverage to general happiness theory and more coverage to considering the consequences of being too happy. General happiness theory is well covered. The presentation is well structured. The presentation could be strengthened by adding clearer Overview and Conclusion slides. Practical, take-home messages are provided. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of animated text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are communicated visually - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Video recording quality was very good. Check lighting - it could be better lit. Image sources and their copyright status are/not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is/not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:06, 17 November 2019 (UTC)