Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Zoo visitor emotion

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Title, sub-title, TOC Very good Sub-title does not match that listed in the book table of contents - make sure its consistent Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Great Section headings Excellent 2-level structure which logically addresses the topic, flows, and meaningfully conveys the content to be covered in each section Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Well developed key points for each section, including citations and interiki links Maybe consider discussing theory/research around kawaii in relation to animals especially young, furry, big-eyed animals etc. Also maybe consider concepts such as zootherapy etc. Good to see coverage of biophilia. Lots of opportunity to provide examples Image One image embedded and captioned. Consider enhancing figure captions to help explain how it illustrates key points being made in the text References Very good. For full APA style: Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:32, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Hey, this topic is fascinating and your chapter is shaping up really well! Couple of quick points (sorry got kids distracting me!):

• Put some key questions or learning objectives in the overview, eg (very rough ideas!) why do we have zoos? what are our emotional responses to zoo visits (main section with theory)? How can understanding emotional responses benefit zoo management? how can zoo visits benefit individuals?
• Consider removing the defining an emotion section - highlight/apply the biophilia hypothesis as a relevant theory instead
• Why do we have zoos is a great place to start, sets the scene for why our emotional responses to zoos matter
• Tie appraisal theory more clearly to the case study and next section - can explain why people have such different experiences
• The case study is great! could expand with some more of their specific experiences and the different emotions they elicited (and how theory applies), rather than just reflection of overall experience?
• Broaden-and-build theory - expand on this and apply eg how positive emotions can broaden our attention the the environment to help us absorb the information we are being presented with, and potentially enhance our connection to the animals as well - relevant for education and conservation respectively. Can also apply to the experience of mixed emotions at zoos eg the negative emotions experienced in response to seeing animals in confinement might be "undone" by the positive emotions of joy, wonder etc
• Consider removing the measurement section, could incorporate main points in the implications for zoo mgmt section if you wanted to keep?
• Implications for zoo management are great. Would be interesting to also consider benefits of zoo visits for individuals - probably different for kids vs older adults vs. depressed etc? Sorry for the ramble, let me know if anything doesn't make sense! All the best! --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 08:27, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Vanessa, my topic is also on emotion and this reference may be helpful in your 'Defining Emotion' of the chapter: Cabanac, M. (2002). What is emotion?. Behavioural Processes, 60(2), 69-83. http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/s0376-6357(02)00078-5 It provides the closest I could fine to an operational definition of emotion Kind regards, Morgan --MorganSlater (discuss • contribs) 23:34, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an exemplary presentation. Structure and content Very well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Effective use is made of narration, text, and image. Production quality The presentation is over the maximum time limit. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Images sources and copyright is well acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:24, 28 November 2017 (UTC)