Hey there! Interesting chapter. I noticed we have some similar points in our chapters, but mine focuses more on resilience. There is an interesting study called "Risk, resilience, recovery" (you can check out my references), which talks about how when a child is exposed to a risk they develop resilience, and once the risk is removed they no longer need the resilience, and focus on recovery. There is also some info there on risk assessment based on previous exposure. Good luck! Telgey (discuss • contribs) 16:46, 20 October 2017, (UTC)
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Avoid providing too much background/generic material (e.g., what is emotion, what is risk assessment etc.). Instead, briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.
A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
It is unclear what major theoretical perspectives will be used
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Overall, this is a promising, but somewhat theoretically dense/abstract chapter. What are the practical, take-home messages to improve our everyday lives?
There is too much general theoretical material about the separate concepts. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., how emotion affects risk assessment). The topic of the chapter isn't directly addresses until approximately half-way through, with the section title "How Emotion can Affect Assessing Risk?".
The chapter was dense/heavy going - consider providing more examples or case studies or other interactive demonstrations of key concepts.
Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
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Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio and video recording quality were good, although there is an audio glitch at 0:10 mins.
