Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Psychological resilience development in children

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Hi, I saw your topic and realised that I had a source from a previous topic I encountered last semester, its for resiliency in children, however, it is based on delinquents. Not sure if it will be where you are heading but it was an interesting read. Hartman, J., Turner, M., Daigle, L., Exum, M. and Cullen, F. (2008). Exploring the Gender Differences in Protective Factors: Implications for Understanding Resiliency. International Journal of Offender Therapy and Comparative Criminology, 53(3), pp.249-277. http://dx.doi.org.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/10.1177/0306624X08326910 --U3136850 (discusscontribs) 10:50, 23 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi! Thank you for this, I am most definitely going to make mention of delinquents because you cannot help but draw the connection between how resilience is often built from low socioeconomic status, and that delinquents are often a result of a low socioeconomic upbringing. But I will be sure to better word it than I just did! Thank you :). (User talk: Telgey) 15:48, 25 August 2017.

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Hi,

I came across this article on promoting resilience in children in regards to global issues such as natural disasters, terrorism, and war, and how to reduce negative consequences in the aftermath. Masten A. S., & Narayan A. J. (2012). Child development in the context of disaster, war, and terrorism: Pathways of risk and resilience. Annual Review of Psychology, 63, 227-257. https://doi-org.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/10.1146/annurev-psych-120710-100356 --Mayoh 11 (discusscontribs) 01:00, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Hey there! I'm currently working on the chapter Emotional resilience in space. I think you might find some of my resources on emotional/psychological resilience interesting, although they do focus less on childhood. I've started putting them in the Resources section of my chapter, so feel free to check back now and then in case they help you in your research! I'll be sure to keep up to date with yours as well, it's a great area of research. I've also made some very minor grammatical changes, you can check them out on your page history of course. Good luck with your chapter! --U3154661 (discusscontribs) 05:02, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

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Hi, I thought this topic sounded very interesting and I hope it is going well. I had an idea of a possible link to add to your external links section. The ABC Life At 5 series has an episode on resilience which may be useful and interesting. Also it is quite relevant as it is a recent Australian study, with quite reputable researchers (i think). I hope its helpful. http://www.abc.net.au/tv/life/about_the_series/life_at_5.htm Cheers Eva.--EvaSutton (discusscontribs) 09:12, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply


Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Good
  2. Sub-title needs correction to be consistent with the book table of contents
  3. Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Confusing to have 2 sections labelled as social contributions
  2. 3 contributions logged
  3. No summaries of the contributions provided - add more detail about what was contributed
  4. Links to contributions are indirect - takes some scrolling and hunting and pecking to find the contribution.
  5. The best links go directly to evidence of the contribution e.g. see book chapter author guidelines

Section headings

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  1. A 2-level heading structure provided (which is about the right level of complexity)
  2. Avoid overly long headings
  3. Definitions do not need their own section - incorporate into the Overview or other sections
  4. "Importance to the subject?" is a vague heading - a stronger chapter could develop more topical headings. Ideally, the material within each section could be useful in its own right and can be linked to, so should have a stand-alone meaningful heading
  5. Make sure to avoid providing too much background/generic material. Instead briefly summarise background concepts and provide wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question posed by the sub-title of chapter.

Key points

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  1. The "Learnt resilience" section contains additional questions which are probably beyond this chapter's scope - instead concentrate on identifying and integrating a summary of the best available psychological theory and research to address the chapter's sub-title (core question). Similar story with "Resilience in the workforce" etc. The key to a good chapter is directly addressing the topic and only addressing the topic.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  3. Consider including more examples/case studies
  4. Relevance of the Resilience scale is dubious - the topic isn't about measurement, unless there are some particularly pertinent issues related to measurement of psychological resilience in children that relates to the development of that resilience

Image

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  1. 2 images embedded - the first one is great and well captioned. It is not clear how the second one is related to the core topic.

References

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  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use full journal name
    3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. OK (include source/destination in brackets after link)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:27, 16 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonable chapter.
  2. The sub-title has been corrected to match the topic listed in the book table of contents.
  1. The section "How is resilience developed?" seems to list groups that are vulnerable to low resilience or need higher resilience in order to cope with risk factors? Needs clearer explanation.
  2. Greater caution is needed around the relationship between early deprivation and resilience (e.g., as implied in the Overview, some sections in the main body, and to a less extent in the Conclusion). The claim that early childhood deprivation is associated with resilience is problematic and needs further explanation/clarification. For example, the combination of challenge and support is more likely to develop resilience, than simply being exposed to challenge. This chapter presents a somewhat simplified and dangerous view that deprivation/challenge is sufficient for developing resilience in children. The quiz question/answer about Sally is also problematic.
  3. The claim that resilience fades away in the absence of risk/challenge is also problematic. Does it fade away or is it dormant is the absence of risk factors? Evidence?
  4. Some sections are not focused on PR in children e.g., "Psychological resilience in the workforce" - remove and focus on the topic, and link to other relevant chapters about related areas.
  1. Several useful/relevant research studies are described.
  2. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  3. The reported results of the Sigal and Weinfeld study seem contradictory and confusing - were participants exposed to war more resilient?
  4. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  5. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  1. Written expression
    1. Some sections only consist of bullet-points, rather than sentences and paragraphs
    2. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Learning features
    1. More use of interwiki links would make the text more interactive.
    2. Basic use of images.
    3. No tables.
    4. 2 case studies.
    5. 1 quiz question.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
    2. Check and correct use of that vs. who
    3. Check and correct of of affect vs. effect
    4. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
  4. APA style
    1. Use APA style for citations.
    2. Use APA style for Figure captions
    3. References
      1. Remove bullet-points
      2. Add hanging indent
      3. Apply APA style capitalisation, italics, full journal names, active doi hyperlinks etc.


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation.
  1. The content is reasonably well selected and organised, however the presentation feels rushed/fast, so to improve, be more selective and what to cover and cover less content more slowly and effectively.
  1. For a more effective presentation, reduce the amount of content and slow down the narration
  2. Some of the text is presenting too quickly on the screen to be read
  3. The visual animated presentation works well.
  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the Title slide and in the meta-data for presentation.
  2. The presentation should be publicly available in the long-term, not just temporarily for marking purposes - as it stands, the link from the book chapter will soon be broken  . One way around this is to export the video to youtube - e.g., see https://www.wikihow.com/Upload-A-GoAnimate-Video-on-YouTube-When-You-Are-Using-A-Free-Trial
  3. No licensing information is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:47, 27 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

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