Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Awe as an emotion

Subtitle

The subtitle doesn't match the one listed here Motivation and emotion/Book/2016. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:27, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Comments

- Just a thought, could you add some pictures? You page content looks good but doesn't really stand out because there are no visual elements. You could really improve this by adding some pictures. :) Sophia sk16 (discuss • contribs) 05:26, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Structure

Avoid having a single sub-section within a section; either add another sub-section or merge the content into the higher level section. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:26, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Awe may promote prosociality

This may be of interest: http://www.apa.org/news/press/releases/2015/05/altruistic-behavior.aspx -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:31, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by addressing the comments provided on this talk page. A more concentrated focus on addressing the questions in the chapter subtitle would help to tighten the focus of the chapter. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Theory In the Overview, establish why the topic is important and explain the approach of the chapter. Awe seems to be somewhat conflated with peak experiences - conceptual clarity/distinction needed here. Some statements were unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) Historical perspective sets a relevant and interesting context. Awe in philosophical history is well written. Awe in sociological history ... is interesting/relevant. Awe in religion - maybe it would make more sense to start with this section, then philosophy, then sociology, then psychology - this structure would make more sense chronologically and theoretically given the psychological focus of the current chapter. Addition of case studies or additional examples could be helpful. Research A limited review of research is provided. When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. A critical perspective is evident, but really only with regard to a lack a research. There is more available. Written expression Written expression Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout See earlier comments about heading casing Avoid sections with only one sub-section. A section should have no sub-sections or at least two sub-sections. The chapter is well-structured. Some images are used, but the chapter could be improved by adding more images. There is minimal use of images or tables. Figure captions should be more explanatory. Learning features Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links. Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added - these only need to be added on first mention of a keyword; use plain text for the keyword subsequently. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour). Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Use APA style for table and figure captions. Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Direct quotes need page numbers. Was the McDougall (1910) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:25, 9 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is a simple, but effective presentation that does a good job of explaining psychological theory about awe. Structure and content Overview Reasonable. Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Selection and organisation Well selected amount of content - not too much or too little. Emphasises theory and synthesis of theory. Well structured. Somewhat addresses a self-help theme. Basic coverage of research. Citations and references are included. Conclusion Good, simple summary. Too general - try to drill down to some practical, take-away messages. Communication Audio Well narrated. Audio is reasonably clear and well-paced. Increase intonation to enhance listener engagement. Visuals Basic - text on half a dozen slides with some images. Increase font size to make text easier to read; reduce the amount of text. Visuals are clear and easy to read. Consider including figures, diagrams, tables, pictures etc. Production quality Overall, basic, effective production. Meta-data Rename the title so that it includes the subtitle (and matches the book chapter). Link to the book chapter not provided. Fill out the description field (e.g., brief description of presentation, link back to the book chapter, license details, and possibly include references, image attributions, and/or transcript). Audio recording quality Excellent Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:09, 22 November 2016 (UTC)