Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/Cognitions and happiness

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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ALLY! Your outline looks fantastic! I like what youve included and I think it stays very true to the theme of the entire book. I would maybe put in something about how to improve without cognitive behavioural therapy? perhaps like a quick steps you can try or sometihng along the lines? just a thought :) Good job! Courtney.reis 04:44, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Hi Ally, I think your outline looks really great - a logical progression of concepts, leading to 'positive affirmations' at the end. I agree with Courtney, maybe something not quite as daunting as CBT, that can be practised cost-free at home etc. Probably the positive affirmations covers this......... Crazydaisy 04:57, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Hey Ally! This is an awesome topic and I really like the direction you are going. With regards to the comments above, maybe you could include something on mindfulness? (I think there is a chapter on this that you could link to?). Also, I'm not sure what theories might be relevant but the marking criteria states that you need to include something theoretical so keep this in mind as you are looking through articles etc. Hope this helps! ShaunaB 05:27, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Hi Ally, That sounds like a really interesting chapter and your outline sounds great to me can't wait to read it all. I agree with the above mentioned comment maybe you could include some info on thought theories related to thought or cognition that are out there :) Kayla 06:22, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Hi Ally, outline is looking good. If you wanted you could include some more positive psychology therapies and theories. Acceptance Commitment therapy is another therapy that uses the poer of the mind to chnage the way we look at things. Good luck :) (Benk 08:07, 2 November 2011 (UTC)).Reply

Nice work Ally!!!! :O Great quotes. Here are some photos of glass half-empty vs. half full that we were talking about if you are interested... [[1]] [[2]] --Jaybay 11:53, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Hi Ally - your outline looks great. I think this will be a great read. I agree with Benk - it might be worth making a point about the effectiveness of ACT because it is so relevant to your topic. I think finishing on the affirmations section is a great idea! Keep up the good work :) (Psych 125 22:21, 2 November 2011 (UTC))Reply

Hi Ally, your outline looks really effective - I'm looking forward to reading the content, seems like a realy interesting topic. Some of the links you have on your facebook page (pictures with quotes) seem as though they could be relevant and beneficial to include if you can get them onto wiki commons and include them. :) AngeM 23:22, 2 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Looking good Ally, love the pictures (they look familiar) and colour scheme. I like the ACT information that you have put in. It is very useful. I won't be able to read anymore of yours coz i'm going to bed and I'm about to submit mine. Keep going the way you've been going and you'll do great Noodles&Wedges 11:11, 6 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Draft Feedback edit

Hi Alison,

Life Circumstance & Valuing Happiness

Fantastic that you mention Brickman and Campbell's hedonic treadmill! You could also include a study by Easterlin (2003) where participants indicated which consumer goods they required to be happy and which items on that list they already owned. Sixteen years later, they rated the items again. Although most participants had acquired their ideal consumer items they now rated adidtional items as necessary for happiness. Happiness retreated at the same rate they progressed towards it, with a 2-item gap between ideal and current lives at both time-points.

What are Cognitions?

What Role do Cognitions Play in Happiness?

Are you planning to expand these sections? Great use of quotes to illustrate the impact of cognitions.

The Power for Change

You might like to mention that Seligman adopted the ABCDE model in teaching learned optimism. See tutorial 3.

Try it yourself box

I think of is meant to be or?

Summary

I look forward to seeing what you include as the main points for your chapter!

Cheers, Rfoster 07:45, 6 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:49, 6 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

Draft feedback edit

I've had a quick look - here's some comments:

  1. I like the use of questions directed at the reader in the Intro
  2. This is potentially such a broad topic that I think the Intro and Summary sections are critical. In the Intro, make sure to frame the problem and explain which perspectives are used (and why) for the current chapter. For the summary, perhaps point out the limitations of the chapter and other relevant topics.
  3. Keep the formatting simple - I've simplified it somewhat
  1. I like the Try it Yourself section - these are excellent, interactive, self-help features.
  2. Since there are several other related happiness chapters, make sure to link them where relevant and appropriate.
  3. Maybe consider cultural differences in cognition and happiness e.g., http://sitemaker.umich.edu/igor.grossmann/files/CDPS359301.pdf
  4. Provide more overview and wrap-up/conclusion for the key section "What Role do Cognitions Play in Happiness?", so that the sub-topics here have some context.
  5. Make the take-home conclusions and messages come through in the summary.

Hope this helps. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:06, 6 November 2011 (UTC)Reply

This chapter has the WOW factor - I am also a big fan of all the Louise Hay books - you might also like to look at Anthony Robbins' books - congratulations on a great chapter - Magnolia

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Overall edit

  1. Overall,

Theory edit

    1. To some extent, this is a pot-pourri of theory. The content offers a good overview of each, but could be more selective and explain the strategy up front. More could be made of appraisal, and, surprisingly, there is little empirical link made between the proposed theoretical causes of happiness and actual happiness outcomes.
    2. Self-esteem - this is a surprising section, given Reeve's (2009) take on self-esteem? Self-esteem might be an indicator of happiness, but its probably not a cause.
    3. Appraisal - this is a key theoretical topic - this could expanded and linked to the RET section
    4. The summary succeeds in bring the theoretical perspectives together into a coherent whole.

Research edit

    1. There is reasonable use of empirical research, although this could be expanded and, more particularly, targetted at cognition and happiness research studies.
    2. No empirical relationships between happiness and self-esteem, appraisal, and self-efficacy are presented?  
    3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
    4. Some claims were unreferenced. See [factual?] tags.

Written expression edit

  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter is written in a friendly, accessible style.
    2. The flow of the chapter could be improved by providing more linking of concepts between sections.
    3. Several statements are not referenced e.g., see [factual?] tags which have been added.
    4. The chapter benefited from soliticing feedback, although perhaps some of the suggestions could have followed up further.
    5. Some paragraphs were overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Learning features
    1. Advanced box layout is used. Whilst some of the more complicated formatting has been removed to assist with accessibility across browsers and platforms, nevertheless this has made for an engaging presentation style which will help to attract and retain readers.
    2. Interwiki links are used effectively.
    3. Some images are used; more could be added.
    4. Effective use of quotes.
    5. Self-content from therapies fitted well with the self-help aim.
  3. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Overall, well done.
  4. APA style
    1. References were in very good APA style - also italicise vol #s.
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:20, 27 November 2011 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is an effective, solid narrated slide/bullet-point presentation.

Structure and content edit

  1. A general introduction establishing focus questions would be useful.
  2. Content was well-selected and structured.
  3. Take home messages work well at the end.

Communication edit

  1. The content is effectively communicated through audio and text/image
  2. Slides are clear and interesting, with a small amount of text (good), well-chosen animations, and accompanying images (good) #Audio was clear and reasonably well-paced, although perhaps was a little fast. Let the ideas sink in a little more.
  3. Tonal variation could be used to help enhance interest and attention.

Production quality edit

  1. Title text was difficult to read.
  2. Font size, text, and colour is easy to read.
  3. Audio was clearly recorded.
  4. Source and attribution for images?
  5. Well done on linking to the chapter in the video description

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:34, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

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