Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/Anger

feedback

Hi - just a quick note. Think the images (esp. 1st one) are excellent. Re the structure, looks like it would work. One thing though, you mention at the beginning that anger has its uses so I wonder if the section heading about Why Shouldn't I be angry is too limiting - what's healthy/what's not? Something's happening to your references too - a dot point caught in the middle. Know it's still a work-in-progress (like everyone's) but hope that helps. Jeanette 13:52, 27 October 2011 (UTC)

Hi! Looks good with the page layout (I really like the anger image too!). Some really good headings - seems like it will have a good balance between biological and cognitive theory and practicals in how to 'deal with it'. I wonder if there are any good youtube clips etc you could link to about how to deal with it as well? I'm doing forgiveness so will be putting a link to your page to help cover the aspect of anger within forgiveness! Naomi 11:15, 1 November 2011 (UTC)

Hi!, your page looks good. Just wondering will you be talking about how drugs and alcohol can make you angry? and also perhaps something about societal views? page looks good looking forward to reading more about it..)Rednoodles 01:26, 2 November 2011 (UTC)

Link to shame?

Hi Not sure if this is helpful. But I did end up talking (briefly) about anger in the shame chapter. It's towards the end of the "Does experiencing shame have any benefits?" section. You may want to link to my chapter (was going to link 2 yours once it's finished). One of the things I find interesting (based on what I'm reading in your draft so far is that the physiological changes for anger and shame do seem to overlap). I'm thinking of the flushed face, the increased heart rate kind of thing, although shame does tend to encourage withdrawal rather than approach. & yes, I am a complete psych geek to keep reading ppl's wiki chapters after all the assessments have been handed in. Good luck with it. :) Regards Jeanette 10:02, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

Fixed your references

Hey fixed your references to the standard format & twiddled with some typos I spotted. Hope that makes me helpful, not an interfering busy body. Just revert to previous if you don't like the way they've turned out. :) Jeanette 10:11, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

re fixed your references

Saw you got rid of the fixes I did to your reference list early on - hope changing back didn't cause you any hassles. :) Jeanette 06:09, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Comment by Magnolia - Ian, you are really doing well on this - keep going and I look forward to reading the completed chapter - well done so far

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall comments This chapter discusses anger and theories in emotion, provides applied examples, utilises numerous wiki features and delivers self-help advice in managing anger. It would benefit from further proof reading and adherence to APA style. Theory Theory comments The main theories in emotion are well covered, including the distinction between cognitive and biological accounts of emotion and the facial feedback hypothesis. In addition, critical analysis of these theories is demonstrated. It may also help to mention how the cognitive and biological perspectives have been incorporated into a two-system view. Theories are applied to real life examples, making the chapter content highly relatable. A definition of emotion itself may have assisted, including the various feeling, arousal, functional and expressive components as these apply to anger. Research Research comments The “Dealing with it section” provides some great strategies for overcoming anger and really targets the self-help aspect of the chapter. The studies are described in great detail and would be strengthened further with effect size statistics. Written expression Written expression comments The Aristotle quote worked brilliantly to set up the topic, mentioning the problem of anger and difficulties in its management. The chapter demonstrates multiple additional features, such as boxes to structure content, images with captions, and an expertly constructed learning quiz. Instead of “this part of the textbook chapter will..” perhaps use “this section will…” Some further proof reading would assist in detecting and eliminating numerous minor textual errors (e.g., “when an a distressing”, “you may have ruminating”, “participants in where told”). APA style could be improved; remember to italicise journal titles and volume numbers in the reference list, when referring to multiple authors in text, ampersand should be replaced with “and”, and anger probably does not need to be capitalised in text.

Rfoster 05:59, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is basic, bullet-point text with narrated audio presentation. Structure and content Basic overview of chapter content provided In the general, use the general introduction to establish the self-help focus questions. No summary take-home messages? Communication Voice-over - main recommendation - slow down. Leave longer pauses between sentences, etc. Cover less content more slowly to allow idea to sink for the viewer. It's not a race! (Less can be more). Consider using more examples Consider using more images to help illustrate key concepts Consider using great tonal variation to enhance interest and attention Little evidence of creativity Production quality Overall, production is rudimentary, but sufficient Audio quality is fair; bit tinny Some text is too small to read easily.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:12, 11 December 2011 (UTC)