Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2024/Dopamine and social behaviour

neurotypical vs neurodivergent

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Hey Deen, super interesting topic (and page!)

Food for thought, have you looked at/is there any research regarding how dopamine effects social behaviour between neurotypical people and neurodivergent people? Could be interesting to look into since nurodivergent people (specially ADHD) tend to have a dopamine deficiency. U3173387 (discusscontribs) 14:50, 15 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Promising 3-level heading structure – could benefit from further development (e.g.., "interaction" repeated e.g,. what role does dopamine in social interaction)
  2. I like the focus on dysfunction - that could be one way to go - i.e., how does D facilitate functional/dysfunctional social interactions
  3. Remove notes from headings
  4. Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings
  1. Excellent - Scenario, image, evocative description of the problem/topic, relevant psychological theory/research, and focus questions
  2. A scenario or case study is presented in a feature box at the start of this section
  3. Add an image to the scenario or case study to help attract reader interest
  4. A brief, evocative description of the problem/topic is provided
  5. Closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings is recommended
  1. Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations
  2. For sections which include sub-sections, include the key points for an overview paragraph prior to branching into the sub-headings
  3. Good balance of theory and research
  4. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Underway
  1. A relevant figure is presented, captioned, and cited
  2. Citation of figures should refer to "Figure X" rather than "figure X" (APA style)
  3. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. Excellent use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters
  2. Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies)
  3. Promising use of table(s)
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies, quiz question(s) etc.
  1. Excellent
  2. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. page numbers should be separated by an en-dash (–) rather than a hyphen (-)
  1. See also
    1. Excellent
  2. External links
    1. Excellent
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Excellent description about self provided
  3. Link(s) provided to professional profile(s)
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Good – two out of three types of contributions made with with direct link(s) to evidence
  2. Also consider making direct improvements to other book chapters (past or current)

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Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good to excellent chapter. It makes excellent use of psychological theory and very good use of research to address a real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. The main potential area for improvement is the style (quality of written expression)
  3. Reasonably good use of academic, peer-reviewed citations to support claims
  4. Use of academic, peer-reviewed citations could be improved in some places (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  5. Move embedded external links into the References section as dois and provide APA style citations
  6. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits
  1. Well developed
  2. I've done some copyediting
  3. Engages reader via a case study or scenario in a feature box with a relevant image
  4. Image generation details have been shifted to File:Social interaction.webp
  5. Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon
  6. The last part of the problem description is a little complicated
  7. Clear focus questions
  1. An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained
  2. Builds effectively on related chapters and Wikipedia articles
  3. Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies)
  4. Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists to help clearly convey key theoretical information
  5. Key citations are well used
  6. There are some places which could benefit from better use of academic, peer-reviewed citations (e.g., see the [factual?] tags)
  7. Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts
  1. Excellent review of relevant research
  2. Excellent critical thinking about relevant research is evident
  3. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. considering the strength of relationships
  1. Excellent integration between theory and research
  1. Very good
  2. Key points are well summarised
  3. Add practical, take-home message(s)
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good
    2. Use 3rd person perspective (e.g., "it") rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you") perspective[1] in the main text, although 1st or 2nd person perspective can work well for case studies or feature boxes
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections
  3. Grammar
    1. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags)
    2. Check and make correct use of commas
    3. Check and correct use of possessive apostrophes (e.g., cats vs cat's vs cats')[2]
    4. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
    5. Consider using a grammar checking tool
    6. Abbreviations
      1. Once an abbreviation has been established (e.g., PTSD), use it consistently aftwarwards
  4. Spelling
    1. Some words are misspelt (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags). Spell-checking tools are available in most internet browsers and word processing software packages.
    2. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour)
  5. Proofreading
    1. More proofreading is needed (e.g., fix punctuation and typographical errors) to bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard
  6. APA style
    1. Express numbers < 10 using words (e.g., two) and >= 10 and over using numerals (e.g., 99)
    2. Figures
      1. Figures are very well well captioned
      2. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text, except for Figure 1
    3. Tables
      1. Table captions use APA style or wiki style
    4. Citations use very good APA style (7th ed.)
      1. Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses
    5. References use excellent APA style:
      1. Use dois instead of external hyperlinks
  1. Excellent use of learning features
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles
  3. Excellent use of image(s)
  4. Excellent use of table(s)
  5. Excellent use of feature box(es)
  6. Excellent use of case studies or examples
  7. Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s)
  8. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section
    1. Move non-Wikiversity/Wikipedia links to References or External links
  9. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section
  1. ~10 logged, useful mostly moderate social contributions mostly with direct links to evidence
  2. In addition, a couple of images were contributed to Wikimedia Commons

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation
  1. An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest (e.g., by introducing a case study or scenario)
  3. A context for the presentation is established
  4. Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation.
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  4. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  5. Ideally, make more explicit use of research
  6. The presentation makes very good use of citations to support claims
  7. Use alphabetical order for citations (APA style)
  8. The presentation makes basic use of one or more examples
  9. The presentation provides basic practical advice
  1. The conclusion provides a very good summary of the most relevant psychological theory and research about this topic
  1. The presentation makes basic use of narrated audio
  2. Consider slowing down to help the listener to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point
  3. Basic intonation
  4. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent
  6. The narrated content is well matched to the target topic
  1. Overall, visual display quality is reasonably good/basic
  2. The presentation makes reasonably good use of text and image based slides
  3. Some of the font size could be larger to make it easier to read
  4. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  5. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by relevant images and/or diagrams
  6. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  7. The visual content is well matched to the target topic
  1. The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand.
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are not clearly indicated
  2. A copyright license for the presentation is clearly indicated

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