Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2023/Childhood trauma and criminal behaviour

Developmental Trauma Theory

Very interesting topic. I am looking forward to reading your Book Chapter. I would highly recommend reading 'The A-Z of Therapeutic Parenting Strategies and Solutions' by Sarah Naish. It would be good to use an example behaviour and speak to the explanation of why a child could be displaying that behaviour of concern and how to relates to complex developmental trauma. U3189442 - K.Ryan (discuss • contribs) 23:57, 23 August 2023 (UTC)

Hi there, thanks so much for your suggestion! I will absolutely give that book and read, sounds like it could be very useful in explaining practical application. Cheers! U3218323 (discuss • contribs) 08:25, 4 September 2023 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example: Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development -- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:35, 20 September 2023 (UTC)

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Title The title is correctly worded and formatted The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted Headings See earlier comment about Heading casing Promising 2-level heading structure – could benefit from further development by expanding the structure The main issue is that I don't see anyting about "subsequent criminal behaviour" Consider adopting closer alignment between the sub-title, focus questions, and top-level headings Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Overview Very good Move case study to top Consider adding an image to the case study to help attract reader interest Use shorter paragraphs Be wary of overpathologising trauma - it is not a diagnosis per se Consider shortening and moving some of the detail into subsequent sections Use 3rd person perspective (except 1st/2nd person can work for feature boxes/scenarios) Key points Excellent – key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations Avoid long quotes - instead express ideas in your own words and use a citation Types of trauma are covered. OK. But how are these types related to subsequent criminal behaviour? That's where the gold is. Otherwise, not much point in covering types in any detail. Good balance of theory and research Ultimately, how strong and what is the nature relationship? And why/how? Conclusion (the most important section): Well developed Underway What might the take-home, practical messages be? (What are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?) Figure Excellent – A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned Figure(s) are cited at least once in the main text. Citation should use a capital (e.g., see Figure 1). Learning feature One use of in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters Promising use of example(s)/case study(ies) Consider including quiz question(s), table(s) etc. References Very good For APA referencing style, check and correct: italicisation inconsistent spacing Resources See also Excellent External links Excellent User page Excellent – used effectively Link to eportfolio not accessible Link provided to book chapter Social contribution At least three different types of contributions with some direct and some indirect link(s) to evidence If adding the second or subsequent link to a page (or a talk page), create a direct link like / Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:35, 20 September 2023 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter. It successfully uses psychological theory and research to address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits Overview Solid Engages reader interest by introducing a case study and/or scenario with an image in a feature box Consider adding a relevant image to the case study Clearly explains the problem or phenomenon The focus questions could be improved by being more specific to the topic (i.e., the sub-title) rather than focusing on childhood trauma more generally Theory An excellent range of relevant theories are selected, described, and explained Builds on one previous, related chapter Build more strongly on other related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters) Insightful depth is provided about relevant theory(ies) Effective use of tables, figures, and/or lists are to help clearly convey key theoretical information Key citations are well used Excellent use of examples to illustrate theoretical concepts Research Excellent review of relevant research Very good critical thinking about relevant research is evident Claims are referenced Integration Excellent integration between theory and research Conclusion Excellent summary and conclusion Key points are well summarised Clear take-home message(s) Style Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is excellent Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead: it is, most often, not needed at all, or use section linking Layout Include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections (see tags) Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags) Use serial commas[1] – they are part of APA style and are generally recommended by grammaticists. See explanatory video (1 min) Tables Table captions use APA style or wiki style Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text using APA style Citations are not in full APA style (7th ed.). For example: If there are three or more authors, cite the first author followed by et al., then year. For example, either: in-text, Smith et al. (2020), or in parentheses (Smith et al., 2020) Separate multiple citations in a list in parentheses using a semi-colon Use ampersand (&) inside parentheses and "and" outside parentheses References use correct APA style Learning features Excellent use of learning features Very good use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text even more interactive. See example. Good use of image(s) Excellent use of table(s) Excellent use of feature box(es) Excellent use of quiz(zes) and/or reflection question(s) Excellent use of case studies or examples Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section Good use of external links in the "External links" section Social contribution ~17 logged, useful, minor to moderate social contributions with ~two-thirds supported by direct links to evidence. Unable to easily verify and assess indirect links.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation Overview An opening slide with the title is displayed. Also display and narrate the sub-title — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Very engaging introduction to hook audience interest Create an engaging introduction to hook audience interest A context for the presentation is established Consider asking focus questions that lead to take-away messages. This will help to focus and discipline the presentation. Content Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section The presentation addresses the topic An appropriate amount of content is presented — not too much or too little The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory The presentation makes reasonably good use of relevant psychological research Consider including key citations to support claims The presentation makes excellent use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information Conclusion A Conclusion slide is presented with a basic summary and take-home message(s) The presentation could be strengthened by expanding on the take-home message (e.g., answers to more than one focus question) Audio The audio is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to listen to The presentation makes effective use of narrated audio Audio communication is well paced Very good intonation The narration is well practiced and/or performed Audio recording quality was excellent The narrated content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Video Overall, visual display quality is excellent The presentation makes creative use of animated images and text The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images The presentation is very well produced The visual content is well matched to the target topic (see content) Meta-data The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation The chapter title is used, but the sub-title (or a shortened version of it) is not used, as the name of the presentation. The sub-title (or an abbreviation of the sub-title that fits within the 100 character limit) would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter sub-title but not the chapter title is used in the name of the presentation. The title would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The video title does not match the chapter title and sub-title — this would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation and be more consistent A very brief written description of the presentation is provided. Expand. Links to and from the book chapter are provided An inactive hyperlink to the book chapter is provided because the YouTube user account does not yet have access to advanced features Licensing Image sources and their copyright status are communicated A copyright license for the presentation is not provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:56, 10 November 2023 (UTC)