Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2022/Resentment

Heading casing

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FYI, the recommended Wikiversity heading style uses sentence casing. For example:

Self-determination theory rather than Self-Determination Theory

Here's an example chapter with correct heading casing: Growth mindset development

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:18, 24 August 2022 (UTC)Reply

Suggestions for this chapter

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Hi, One thing that can make your chapter more interactive is by adding hyperlinks to certain words - e.g., linking the word disgust to the wikipedia disgust page. You can also add relevant chapters to your see also section - e.g., adding the 2022 disappointment chapter, or the 2011 anger chapter. U3216256 (discusscontribs) 02:51, 12 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hello! Thank you for the suggestion, I have added in some hyperlinks now to previous book chapters and wikipedia pages that are relevant to my topic. U3216389 (discusscontribs) 00:10, 12 October 2022 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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  1. The title is correctly worded and formatted
  2. The sub-title is correctly worded and formatted
  1. Excellent – used effectively
  2. Description about self provided
  3. Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile or resume such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks.
  4. Link provided to book chapter
  1. Excellent – at least one contribution has been made and summarised in a numbered list with direct link(s) to evidence
  1. See earlier comment about Heading casing
  2. Basic heading structure – would benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure
  3. Avoid having sections with only 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings
  4. Consider providing more detailed headings so that it is more clear what will be covered in each section
  5. What causes resentment and what are its consequences could be different sections
  1. Basic development of key points for each section, with relevant citations
  2. Write the chapter using 3rd person perspective, although a case study or feature box could use 1st or 2nd person perspective
  3. Overview - Consider adding:
    1. an evocative description of the problem and what will be covered
    2. focus questions
    3. an image
    4. an example or case study
  4. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., about general emotion theory). Briefly summarise general concepts and provide internal wiki links to relevant book chapters and/or Wikipedia pages for further information. Then focus most of the content of this on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
  5. Strive for an integrated balance of theory and research
  6. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  7. Consider including more examples/case studies
  8. Conclusion (the most important section):
    1. Hasn't been developed
    2. What might the take-home, practical messages be?
    3. In a nutshell, what are the answer(s) to the question(s) in the sub-title and/or focus questions?
  1. A relevant figure is presented and it is appropriately captioned; ideally, the Figures will be more directly tailored to the topic (resentment)
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text
  3. Consider increasing image size from to make it easier to view
  1. OK
  2. Only use academic, peer-reviewed references
  3. For APA referencing style, check and correct:
    1. capitalisation
    2. remove ResearchGate etc. - go to original source and provide the doi
    3. page numbers should be provided
  1. See also
    1. Limited development
    2. Also link to relevant book chapters
    3. Also link to relevant Wikipedia pages
  2. External links
    1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:23, 26 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Referring to figures in text

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Hi, Your chapter looks well-developed. Don't forget to refer to all of your images in-text. You have only done this for 4 of your images. U3216256 (discusscontribs) 23:08, 13 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Hello! Thanks for the feedback, I didn't realise I had not referred to them, must've been a mind blank hah. But good point, will try and find a spot to refer to them. Thanks again! U3216389 (discusscontribs) 01:05, 14 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Book chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter that makes good use of psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. Slightly over the maximum word count.
  3. For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits.
  1. Solid Overview.
  2. The definition of resentment here seems to be as a group-based emotion as opposed to an individual emotion? Clarify.
  3. Useful case study or example to help engage reader interest.
  4. Image illustrates anger rather than resentment.
  5. Suggest embedding links to one or more relevant anger chapters.
  6. Clear focus question(s).
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  2. The chapter doesn't wander off into discussion of irrelevant theory.
  3. It is impressive that resentment is considered at both an individual and group level.
  4. Build more strongly on other emotion-related chapters (e.g., by embedding links to other chapters in this category: Category:Motivation and emotion/Book/Emotion).
  1. Appropriate depth is provided about the selected theory(ies).
  2. Key citations are well used.
  3. The Reeve (2018) textbook and some non-academic sources are overused as citations – instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  4. Tables and/or lists are used effectively to help clearly convey key theoretical information. However, the lists did not use wiki list style per Tutorial 02 (have been changed).
  5. Several useful examples are provided to illustrate theoretical concepts.
  1. Reasonably good review of relevant research.
  2. More detail about key studies would be ideal.
  3. Greater emphasis on effect sizes, major reviews, and/or meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Very good critical thinking about research is evident.
  2. Critical thinking about research could be further evidenced by:
    1. describing the methodology (e.g., sample, measures) in important studies
    2. considering the strength of relationships
    3. acknowledging limitations
    4. pointing out critiques/counterarguments
    5. suggesting specific directions for future research
  3. Claims are referenced.
  1. Discussion of theory and research is well integrated.
  1. Key points are well summarised.
  2. Clear take-home message(s).
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the quality of written expression is very good.
    2. Internationalise: Write for an international, rather than domestic, audience. Australians make up only 0.32% of the world human population. However, a case study involving Indigenous Australian communities could work well.
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead:
      1. it is, most often, not needed at all, or
      2. use section linking.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which branch into sub-sections should include an introductory paragraph before branching into the sub-sections.
    2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading – use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
    3. See earlier comments about heading casing.
  3. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are very good.
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation (e.g., Resentment).
  4. APA style
    1. Do not capitalise the names of disorders, therapies, theories, etc..
    2. Direct quotes need page numbers – even better, write in your own words.
    3. Figures
      1. Figures are very well used.
      2. Figures are very well captioned.
      3. Figure captions use the correct format.
      4. Each Figure is referred to at least once within the main text
    4. Tables
      1. Table captions use APA style.
      2. Refer to each Table using APA style (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation).
      3. Each Table is referred to at least once within the main text.
    5. Citations use very good APA style.
      1. Multiple citations in parentheses should be listed in alphabetical order by first author surname.
    6. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation[1]
      2. Move non-peer-reviewed sources to the external links section
      3. Full journal titles are sometimes missing.
      4. Do not italicise commas
  1. Overall, the use of learning features is excellent.
  2. Excellent use of embedded in-text interwiki links to Wikipedia articles. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words and technical concepts would make the text more interactive. See example.
  3. Links to non-peer-reviewed sources should be moved to the external links section.
  4. Excellent use of image(s).
  5. Excellent use of table(s).
  6. Excellent use of feature box(es).
  7. No use of quiz(zes).
  8. Very good use of case studies or examples. Some of these could be improved by being more related to resentment.
  9. Excellent use of interwiki links in the "See also" section.
  10. Excellent use of external links in the "External links" section.
  11. Format bullet-points and numbered lists, per Tutorial 1.
  1. ~45 logged, useful, minor to major social contributions with direct links to evidence.
  2. Thanks very much for your extensive contributions.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:36, 30 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation
  2. Didn't need last 6 secs, so cut off at 3 min
  1. An opening slide with the title and sub-title is displayed and narrated — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation
  2. This presentation has an engaging introduction to hook audience interest
  3. A context for the topic is established
  4. Focus questions are presented
  1. Comments about the book chapter may also apply to this section
  2. The presentation addresses the topic
  3. The presentation is well structured (i.e., Overview, Content, Conclusion)
  4. The presentation makes excellent use of relevant psychological theory
  5. The presentation makes basic use of relevant psychological research
  6. The presentation includes citations
  7. The presentation makes very good use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice
  8. The presentation provides practical, easy to understand information
  1. A Conclusion slide is presented with excellent/very good/good/basic take-home message(s)
  1. The audio is easy to follow
  2. Audio communication is clear and well paced
  3. Very good intonation enhances listener interest and engagement
  4. The narration is well polished
  5. Audio recording quality was excellent
  1. Overall, visual display quality is excellent
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides
  3. Move cursor off recording screen
  4. Consider consistent use of sentence casing (instead of all capitals)
  5. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read
  6. The amount of text presented per slide makes it easy to read and listen at the same time
  7. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images and/or diagrams
  8. The presentation is well produced using simple tools
  1. The chapter title and sub-title (or an abbreviation to fit within the 100 character limit) are used in the name of the presentation — this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Check capitalisation.
  2. A written description of the presentation is provided
  3. Links to and from the book chapter are provided
  1. Image sources and their copyright status are communicated
  2. Ideally, provide clickable links to the original image sources (e.g., in the description)
  3. A copyright license for the presentation is provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:25, 8 November 2022 (UTC)Reply

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