Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2020/Psychological need satisfaction and body image

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Excellent Consider linking to your eportfolio page and/or any other professional online profile such as LinkedIn. This is not required, but it can be useful to interlink your professional networks. Social contribution Excellent Summarised with direct link(s) to evidence. Section headings Promising 2-level heading structure. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Move SDT up and include Autonomy, Competence, and Relatedness within it? Key points Very good development of key points, with relevant citations. Avoid providing too much background information. Briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then focus most of the content on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Overview - Consider adding: an image. an example or case study. Covers theory and research. But note that the key will be ensuring that as much literature as possible similar to Thøgersen-Ntoumani, and Ntoumanis (2007) is covered. The key section for this chapter will be "The relationship between psychological need satisfaction and body image". The lead-in sections are much less important. And the Overview and Conclusion are important. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author initials). Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Conclusion (the most important section) hasn't been developed. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. consider expanding the caption detail to explain more about the image and how it connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Excellent Include dois where they are available Resources See also Excellent External links No need for help resources (outside of scope of chapter) but it could be useful to link to pages with specific info of interest Target an international audience; Australians only represent 0.33% of the world population Include source in brackets after link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:37, 19 September 2020 (UTC)

Social Contribution

Hey! I came across this website that discusses body image in a nice and simple way. I thought it could be a nice and easy website that could be use to educate school aged kids on your topic https://butterfly.org.au/eating-disorders/eating-disorders-explained/ --U3175502 (discuss • contribs) 07:47, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for this! I'll add it to my external links! -- Maddison gray1 (discuss • contribs) 08:24, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising chapter but it insufficiently targets the specific topic. This chapter is over the maximum word count. There is too much general background material (contributing to the chapter being over the word count and insufficiently targetted at the topic (as specified by the sub-title questino). Instead, summarise and link to further information (such as other book chapters or Wikipedia articles), to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. The chapter starts effectively addressing the topic with the section "Psychological need satisfaction and body image". For additional feedback, see the following comments and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are selected and described, but only a basic description of the integration of PNs and BI is provided. There is too much emphasis on describing the background concepts of BI and PNs separately. There are other chapters and/or Wikipedia articles about these topics. So provide a summary, link to them, and then expand the material about the relationship between PNs and BI. Research Similar comments as for theory. There is insufficent coverage of research specifically about the relationship between PNs and BI (e.g., Brichacek et al.) When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicating the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is very good Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Instead, use section linking. Use 3rd person perspective rather than 1st (e.g., "we") or 2nd person (e.g., "you")[1]. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Layout The chapter is reasonably well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Reduce the prelim content; expand the PNs and BI content. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Excellent use of in-text links. Limited use of case studies - this topic lends itself to richer use of case studies to illustrate key points about the relationship between PNs and BI. Good use of images; make sure to refer to each image at least once in the text. Basic use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Grammar Use serial commas[2] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~8 logged social contributions across two platforms, some with direct links to evidence, some without direct links.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:02, 7 November 2020 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a solid presentation. Structure and content An appropriate amount of content is presented - not too much or too little. Comments about the book chapter probably also apply to this section. The presentation is well structured. Consider adding and narrating an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation makes very good use of theory. The presentation makes basic use of research. The presentation makes some use of one or more examples or case studies or practical advice. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). Communication The presentation makes good use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is supplemented in a basic way by some images. The diagrams are helpful to highlight key text. Production quality The video is well produced using simple tools. The video is basically produced using simple tools. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter sub-title but not the title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was excellent. Visual display quality was very good. Image sources and their copyright status are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided. Consider expanding.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:23, 23 November 2020 (UTC)