Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Regulatory focus theory and goal pursuit

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:04, 30 August 2019 (UTC)

@Dtd1986: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:47, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

The regulatory focus section of 'Temptations' from the 2017 book may be useful as an external link. --U3176966 (discuss • contribs) 08:52, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good Capitalisation of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents User page Created, with description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution 1 contribution claimed without direct link to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Well developed 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Key points Overview and Overview - empty :( Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Key points - Basic development for most sections, with relevant citations. Use APA style for citations (e.g., do not include author initials). Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Very good. For full APA style: Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:28, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Feedback

Under the heading "Regulatory Focus Theory"

• The sentence starting"RFT is about behavioural manifestations of motivation behaviour;" does not make sense to me because I don't know what "motivation behaviour" is. Consider rephrasing or explaining motivation behaviour.

Under the heading "In the Workplace"

• The paragraph starting "Both promotion- and prevention-focus are crucial to the successful running of an organisation or business" does not have any references, make sure to cite before where you got this information from
• The paragraph below the one mentioned above you have a long paragraph which contains a long example, to break the text up and to make it a bit more engaging you may want to take everything after "For example" in that paragraph and convert it to a feature box. Also consider if you can add any references to your examples of how RFT will affect the workplace.

Under the heading "references" Your references are looking great, the only thing you could improve is your DOI displays:

FYI, the current way to display a doi in apa format is to precede it with https://doi.org/

For example doi: 10.1037/arc0000014 should be displayed as https://doi.org/10.1037/arc0000014

For more details see https://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

General feedback Your writing style is good and easy to read. Your paragraphs are a little bit long particularly for the medium of a web document. consider breaking this up with features boxes and a few more images. At the moment you have a large list of references, however it looks like you could include this more with increases of in text referencing.

hope this makes sense, let me know if I did not explain myself clearly,

Good luck with your assignment

--U3172958 (discuss • contribs) 12:23, 18 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links; also embed links to related book chapters. Very good use of images; consider expanding captions. No use of tables. Excellent use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. The quiz questions could be more effective as learning prompts by being embedded as single questions within each corresponding section rather than being presented as a set of questions at the end. Excellent use of examples. Grammar, spelling, and proofreading are excellent. APA style Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References use correct APA style. Social contribution ~15 logged, useful, substantial, social contributions within the 24 hours before chapters were due with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:23, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon animation and video clips. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Practical take-home message(s) that can be applied? Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider using greater intonation to enhance listener interest and engagement. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter sub-title but not the title are used in the video title - the latter would help to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Add an opening slide which contains the chapter title and sub-title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was good/a bit quiet - consider muting the background music to help the listener concentrate on the narration. Video recording quality was excellent. Excellent use of video clips. Image sources are stated in general. What is the source of the video clips? A copyright license for the presentation is/not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:47, 18 November 2019 (UTC)