Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Motivational intensity theory

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:55, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Very good Social contribution Link doesn't go directly to evidence of contribution See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings Some development, but underdone Consider possibly 3-5 top-level headings between Overview and Conclusion Key points Some development Expand on the key sections, especially Overview (e.g. focus questions? case studies/examples?) and Conclusion before fleshing out too far Image Expand image display size so that it is easier to read References Good Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:55, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Feedback 2019

Hi Josh - looking great so far. ---- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:44, 14 August 2019 (UTC)

Hi, edited your reference list to put journal sources in italics. --U3170393 (discuss • contribs) 10:21, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Hey, found an interesting journal article that may be useful for your book chapter: https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/pdf/10.1111/spc3.12007 --Matthewshats97 (discuss • contribs) 17:55, 9 October 2019 (UTC)

Hey if you're looking for another theory to connect your article too, I think the Fraud Triangle could be an interesting theory to look at. In a way it adds another element to the motivational intensity theory and is more specific in its action direction. --Jackmccann021 (discuss • contribs) 07:53, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi! Great book chapter. Just a quick suggestion before you submit your book chapter: Consider using interwiki links :) - Good luck! --U3145293 (discuss • contribs) 09:30, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Very good Authorship details removed - authorship is as per the page's editing history User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Excellent Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - perhaps could benefit from further development (e.g., sub-headings within "Development of motivational intensity theory") Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings Key points Key points are reasonably well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Conclusion? Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Resources See also Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly Also link to past relevant chapters External links Use bullet-points Rename links so that they are more user friendly

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:45, 25 September 2019 (UTC)

Remove full-stops from headings

@Joshgrain: Suggestion: Remove full-stops from headings. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:04, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a moderately good chapter that uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. How does the Overview case study illustrate MIT? Explain. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is selected, described, and explained. More examples would be helpful. Some of the explanation is convoluted. Try providing some simple summaries at the beginning and end of major sections. Research Relevant research is reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Greater emphasis on major reviews and/or meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the quality of written expression is reasonably good. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned"). Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Check and make correct use of commas. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numerals (e.g., 10). Direct quotes need page numbers. Figures and tables Use APA style to refer to each Table and each Figure (e.g., do not use italics, check and correct capitalisation). Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Select up to a maximum top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~13 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:16, 13 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of animation. Structure and content I'm not sure the opening example clearly explains MIT? Wouldn't it make more sense the other way around (e.g., I would go to see the band if 5 mins away but less likely if 10 hours away?). The rest is excellent - clear explanations with examples. The presentation is well structured. The presentation could be strengthened by adding an Overview slide and a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Also use this title and sub-title for the video title. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:04, 16 November 2019 (UTC)