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Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.
As per earlier comment, abbreviate the background info about flow as a stand-alone concept and leisure as a stand-alone concept - and provide internal links to Wikiversity or Wikipedia pages with the more info. Instead, expand the section "The relationship between leisure and flow" because this is what the current chapter should be primarily about. Because this section is so important, consider whether dividing into separate sections or having sub-sections may be useful.
Avoid overly long paragraphs - try 3 to 5 sentences.
Summary boxes are helpful (use bullet-points)
Consider including more examples/case studies.
Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.
Conclusion - practical take-home messages?
Write in third person perspective (e.g., remove second person "you", "we" etc.).
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Overall, this is an excellent chapter from a theoretical and especially research point of view. The chapter could be improved by providing more practical, everyday examples, to help appeal to a general audience.
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Latest comment: 5 years ago1 comment1 person in discussion
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Reasonably well selected content - not too much or too little. Perhaps to improve, consider less theoretical content with more examples.
The presentation is reasonably well structured.
Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s), however ideally the take-home messages would be more practical (i.e., what can the viewer apply now, in their everyday lives?).
The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Use the chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
Audio recording quality was OK, but I suspect an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks can be heard - review microphone set-up.
Video recording quality was excellent.
Image sources and their copyright status are provided in general; preferably provide exact links to each image source and indicate their respectives licenses.
A copyright license for the presentation is/not provided.
A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data.
A link to the book chapter is provided.
A link from the book chapter is provided.
A brief written description of the presentation is provided.