Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Junk food and psychological distress

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

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Hello! As I was reading about your distinction between how stress can be good and bad, it made me think about a TED Talk we listened to in class which taught us to try to change our negative perception of stress. It's very interesting and you should check it out. Here's the link: https://www.ted.com/talks/kelly_mcgonigal_how_to_make_stress_your_friend?language=en --Dunlapd (discusscontribs) 23:18, 22 October 2019 (UTC)DunlapdReply

Hi, I noticed that you needed a definition to decipher between stress and distress. According to Selye’s biological stress model there is originally a stressor, which is defined as the catalyst for negative emotions such as an aversive event. This stressor is relatively subjective and therefore individual factors determine if it will turn into stress. Then there is the Generating Adaptation Syndrome, which is said to be stress itself. This stress includes an alarm reaction, a stage of resistance, and a stage of exhaustion. Essentially meaning that it is the physiological symptoms, the body is under pressure or stress. And finally there are maladaptive or adaptive cognitive behaviours, which are defined as distress. This is only one model, but it may be a research starting point. Here's the reference incase.. Wheaton, B., Montazer, S., A Handbook for the Study of Mental Health., Cambridge; 2:171-174., I couldn't find the DOI so I included the webpage.http://citeseerx.ist.psu.edu/viewdoc/download?doi=10.1.1.466.9749&rep=rep1&type=pdf#page=193 --U3175271 (discusscontribs) 11:45, 16 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

--U3182366 (discusscontribs) 07:24, 17 October 2019 (UTC)Hi, my book chapter is still in development,but my topic is pretty similar (Stress and diet - what is the relationship between stress and diet?), so feel free to have a read through what i've done so far to get some ideas:) https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2019/Stress_and_dietReply

Also i found this article quite interesting as it summarises a number of studies related to what food you should eat when you are stressed/ to prevent stress. https://www.everydayhealth.com/wellness/united-states-of-stress/ultimate-diet-guide-stress-management/ --U3182366 (discusscontribs) 12:08, 17 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 26 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

@U3141421: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:38, 20 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Topic development feedback

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The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title and sub-title

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Created, with description about self and link to book chapter
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Excellent

Section headings

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  1. Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development
  2. Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings.
  3. See earlier comment about Heading casing.
  4. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  5. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title.

Key points

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  1. Overview - Consider adding focus questions
  2. Lack of development of key points for the most critical section: "Eating junk food and psychological distress"
  3. Conclusion - Incomplete
  4. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles.
  5. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  6. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section.

Image

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  1. Provided, with caption - but use APA style
  2. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References

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  1. 2 provided
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct italicisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html

Resources

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  1. Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:25, 26 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

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@U3141421: Use interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. For example: Who was Nostradamus? Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:39, 20 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is generally good, but can also be improved in several ways.
    2. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    3. Some paragraphs are overly long (e.g., last paragraph). Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    4. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    3. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section.
  3. Learning features
    1. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of feature boxes - consider increasing width.
    6. Good use of quizzes.
    7. Basic use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style and generally recommended by grammaticists.
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Check and correct references to each Table and each Figure in the text - use APA style.
    3. Use APA style for Table captions. See example.
    4. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
      2. Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets.
    5. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct use of italicisation.
  1. ~16 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:51, 6 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of powtoon animation.
  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. The presentation is well structured.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. A Conclusion is presented with practical take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and animated image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. The font size is mostly sufficiently large to make it easy to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images.
  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was excellent.
  3. Video recording quality was excellent.
  4. Image sources should be acknowledged (i.e., powtoon).
  5. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:46, 17 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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