Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Intention-behaviour gap

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Great page! I did a bit of research on your topic and found this interesting meta-analysis which may assist you in completing this page. The article I found is called Planning bridges the intention-behaviour gap: Age makes a difference and strategy use explains why . I found this article great as it explores different variables to other studies on the same subject. It explores the use of behaviour change strategies that include selection, optimisation and compensation as underlying mechanisms for age differences. Hope this helps! --U3175650 (discusscontribs) 12:06, 1 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

I recently had to incoporate the behaviour intention gap into a health psychology report, specifically how implementation intentions could be used, and found it had really cool implications in assisting people in making actual behaviour change. Here's an article that you may find useful in your research. Armitage, C. J. (2009). Effectiveness of Experimenter-Provided and Self-Generated Implementation Intentions to Reduce Alcohol Consumption in a Sample of the General Population: A Randomized Exploratory Trial. Health Psychology, 28(5), 545-553. doi:10.1037/a0015984 Good luck! --Joshgrain (discusscontribs) 03:20, 16 October 2019 (UTC)Reply


Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title

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  1. Capitalisation and content of the title/sub-title has been corrected to be consistent with the book table of contents

User page

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  1. Created, with description about self
  2. Add link to book chapter

Social contribution

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  1. Summarised with indirect links to evidence.
  2. Simplify summary.
  3. Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions.

Section headings

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  1. Basic, 1-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps using a 2-level structure.

Key points

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  1. Overview - Consider adding focus questions.
  2. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters.
  3. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview.
  4. Consider including more examples/case studies.
  5. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end.

Image

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  1. An image (figure) is presented.
  2. Caption didn't use APA style (see changes).
  3. Cite each figure at least once in the main text.

References

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  1. Good.
  2. For full APA style:
    1. Use correct capitalisation
    2. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
    3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. Very good

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Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. This chapter is well over (~1000 words) the maximum word count.
  2. Otherwise, this is a very promising chapter that could be improved by being more selective and more specifically targetting the intended audience (e.g., someone who wants to know how to reduce the IB gap based on psychological science).
  3. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. However, too much is covered in too much depth. The challenge here is to be more selective of the theory that is most relevant to the question.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. However, again, the challenge is to be more selective of the most relevant research.
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. Overall, the chapter is very well written. However, it is overly long.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    3. Avoid directional referencing (e.g., "As previously mentioned").
    4. The Conclusion should not contain sub-headings.
    5. The Conclusion could be improved by providing more emphasis on practical, take-away messages about the IB gap.
  2. Layout
    1. The chapter is reasonably well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. However, the structure is overly complex/detailed. Consider simplifying.
  3. Learning features
    1. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1.
    2. External links - indicate destination source in parentheses
    3. Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to other book chapters.
    4. Embedding more interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    5. Good use of images.
    6. Excellent use of tables.
    7. Some use of feature boxes (for quizzes). Feature boxes are ideal for examples or case studies.
    8. Effective use of quizzes.
    9. Very good use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    2. Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style.
  5. APA style
    1. Citations are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    2. References are not in full APA style. For example:
      1. Check and correct use of italicisation.
      2. See new doi format.
  1. ~3 logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:42, 5 November 2019 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation.
  2. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools.
  1. Well selected content - not too much or too little.
  2. Excellent use of diagrams.
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  4. A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s).
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  2. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  3. Well paced.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  5. The visual communication is effectively organised by models and diagrams.
  1. Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. Audio recording quality was good.
  3. Visual display quality was excellent.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided.
  5. Copyright licenses and source for images not provided. If copyright has been violated, remove presentation. Otherwise, add this info into the video description.
  6. A link to the book chapter is provided.
  7. A link from the book chapter is provided.
  8. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:01, 18 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

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