Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Hope theory

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Hi there, great page with a great layout and use of literature! If I may add that the opening two sentences in the overview section need to be changed or re-worded. I makes sense but a better choice or words would suit your opening statements for this page. Apart from that, the pages looks great! Good luck and hope this helps. U3175650 (discuss • contribs) 01:58, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

Hi, great chapter page. Clear evidence of effort and a good amount of research. I think the key changes now are mostly formatting; I think your chapter would benefit from utilising more heading lines, just to space out the information more and allow it to read more easily. Consider using more coloured text boxes for key information (like you used for your focus questions), this would work well for your case study as it makes the information stand out. Ensure you include both internal and external links, it may be worthwhile to utilise links to websites and personal stories/blogs about hope. Here are a couple of links to interesting websites that discuss more on hope theory. http://www.thepositivepsychologypeople.com/hope-theory-and-goals-at-work/ https://www.oxfordhandbooks.com/view/10.1093/oxfordhb/9780195187243.001.0001/oxfordhb-9780195187243-e-030 U3175218 (discuss • contribs) 01:33, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:23, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Good User page Created Expand description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence. Section headings Promising 2-level heading structure. Consider simplifying the number of top-level headings. Key points Key points are reasonably developed for each section. Add citations. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles and/or to other relevant book chapters. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section rather than having one longer quiz towards the end. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption does not use APA style - see changes to Figure 1. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Use more relevant links to book chapters and Wikipedia articles Also link to past relevant chapters External links This probably should be a reference

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:23, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Interwiki links

@U3175664: Use interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. For example: Who was Nostradamus? Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:21, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help explain a theory and explain its application. This chapter is over the maximum word count. The section on measurement could have been shorter. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theory is well selected, described, and explained. Perhaps also consider: Is a clear definition of hope provided? Is a practical example of hope provided? Hope theory pre-Snyder? Similarities/differences to (learned) optimism? What is the opposite of hope? Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Excellent case studies Interwiki links are particularly well used. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of images, tables, feature boxes, and quizzes. Grammar The grammar for several sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos. APA style Use APA style for Figure captions. See example. Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Citations are presented using very good APA style. Social contribution Very minor contribution; minimal logged social contribution

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:54, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a promising, basic presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content It is useful to have examples. However, this presentation places an overemphasis on a sport context. The presentation seems rushed in pace - perhaps it attempts to cover too much content? Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Add an extra slide with a description of hope. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Communication The presentation makes reasonably effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Slow down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read (e.g,. injury slide). The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality Check and correct casing and grammar for chapter title and sub-title in the video title and on the opening slide. Audio recording quality was so-so - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was good. I am doubtful that you own the copyright for the images. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation because it may have violated copyright. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. An excellent written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:08, 18 November 2019 (UTC)