Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Gender transformation motivation

DOI display

FYI, the current way to display a doi in apa format is to precede it with https://doi.org/

For example doi: 10.1037/arc0000014 should be displayed as https://doi.org/10.1037/arc0000014

For more details see https://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

--U3172958 (discuss • contribs) 11:53, 9 October 2019 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings (or sentence casing). For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:43, 30 August 2019 (UTC)

@U3160551: Just drawing your attention to the suggestion above. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 21:17, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

@U3160551: Just a reminder about this feedback. Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:22, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Very interesting read, I look forward to seeing the whole chapter! --U3162204 (discuss • contribs) 06:06, 31 August 2019 (UTC)

Hi! Thought it may be an interesting addition to discuss the age of gender transformation, as there have been a few articles floating around about allowing children to have gender transformations (under 18) - could be informative to discuss motivation behind that too? 02/09/2019, 5:36am u3177340

Hey there, have a look at make sure you only capitalise proper nouns and not procedure e.g. gender transformation. Look forward to reading the full chapter! Sunbear25 (discuss • contribs) 05:18, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

Some information regarding the differences and similarities within the transgender, transexual, transvestite and non binary communities could add a great deal of depth into the page, as well as allowing the reader to gain further knowledge into the spectrum of gender identity. --U3162204 (discuss • contribs) 09:52, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing the chapter plan. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks are available via UCLearn. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Summarised with link Section headings Overly complex/incomplete 3-level heading structure - could benefit from further development, perhaps simplify to a a 2-level structure. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections with only 1 sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., history). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Overall, key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Overview - Consider adding focus questions. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Explain relevance of Maslow's hierarchy more clearly - or perhaps drop it in favour of theories with more research support in the context of gender transformation. Good to see the section on what discourages - this is just as important as what motivates. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Content good See changes I've made to recommended formatting style

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:59, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Definitions

Hey there, really liked your use of theoretical applications to start unpacking the importance of need fulfillment in the motivation to transform genders. only had a small point, just because gender transformation can be confusing I would suggest using the terminology "gender reassignment surgery" instead of "gender confirmation surgery" interchangeably, as someone with very basic knowledge, I interpreted that as confirming the sex you were born with. not a huge issue just a suggestion for simplicity. the only other thing was the overview and then the explanation of the topic had like 1 line of repetition where the definition for gender transformation is seemingly present twice. other then that this looks really well thought out :) Chelsey.mcnair (discuss • contribs) 04:25, 10 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via UCLearn Canvas, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory, with critical review. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written Expand abbreviations when first used (e.g., DSM-V, LGBTQI+). Layout The chapter is well structured. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to other book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Basic use of images. See also - include source in brackets No use of tables. No use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. No use of case studies or examples. For numbered lists, use Wikiversity formatting per Tutorial 1. Grammar Use serial commas[1] - it is part of APA style. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10). Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Do not include retrieval date. Check and correct use of italicisation. Social contribution ~5 logged social contributions with indirect links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:00, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, this is an basic presentation. This presentation makes use of simple tools. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - content beyond 3 mins is ignored for marking purposes. Structure and content Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Content selection probably focuses too much on gender transformation in general rather than motivations for gender transformation (the latter starts to be addressed about half way through). Over-reliance on Maslow's hierarchy. Lack of visual presentation for second theory. What are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Communication The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The presentation could be improved by increasing the font size. Also consider using sentence casing rather than all capitals (can be seen as "shouting"). The visual communication is supplemented by images. Production quality Communicate the chapter title and sub-title in both the video title and on the opening slide this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was OK - probably an on-board microphone was used because keyboard clicks were audible. Consider using an external microphone. Visual display quality was good. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. Copyright may have been violated. Either acknowledge the image sources and their licenses in the video description or remove the presentation. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is provided but it goes to a specific section rather than the top of the chapter. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very basic written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:21, 18 November 2019 (UTC)