Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Food and fear

Peer feedback

Hi Grace! I have had a read through your chapter and it's super interesting! A tip that I would add is to include hyperlinks in the first introduction of key terms. I have listed some below with corresponding URLs from Wikipedia that may help:

1. Fear - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Fear
2. Evolutionary development - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Evolutionary_developmental_biology
3. Anxiety - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anxiety
4. Temporal lobe - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Temporal_lobe
5. Amygdala - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Amygdala
6. Phobias - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Phobia
7. Anorexia nervosa - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anorexia_nervosa

I hope these were of some assistance to you! Good luck, thanks, Maddie.--120.21.77.190 (discuss) 06:55, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with description about self and link to book chapter Used effectively Social contribution Several summarised with indirect links to evidence Add direct links to evidence. To do this: View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click "compare selected revisions", and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see Making and summarising social contributions. Section headings Under-developed and overly complex 2-level heading structure; simplify Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information. Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Reduce overuse of coloured boxes Key points Focus on directly addressing the topic (the sub-title). Overview - Under-developed Include in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider introducing a case study in the Overview. Consider including more examples/case studies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image An image (figure) is presented. Caption uses APA style. Caption could better explain how the image connects to key points being made in the main text. Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Resources Excellent

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 08:04, 28 September 2019 (UTC)

Interwiki links

@Uni.GLC: Use interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. For example: Who was Nostradamus? Sincerely, James -- Jtneill - Talk - c 03:31, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. This chapter is well over the maximum word count. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g,. about fear). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic (i.e., the sub-title question). Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. Use third person perspective rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Review question should be included within the sections that the questions are about. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to other book chapters. Interwiki links are well used. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Excellent use of images. Excellent use of tables. Excellent use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Excellent use of case studies or examples. Spelling Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour; fulfillment vs. fulfilment). APA style Use APA style for Table captions. See example. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Citations use correct APA style. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. See new doi format. Social contribution ~3 minor, logged, useful, social contributions with direct links to evidence following topic development; mostly close to due date.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:41, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). A Conclusion slide is presented with a take-home message(s). But what are the practical take-home message(s) that we can use to help improve our everyday lives? Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good but probably used an on-board microphone rather than an external microphone because keyboard clicks were audible. Visual display quality was excellent. Image sources and their copyright status are not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided in the video description but not in the meta-data. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A very brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:08, 18 November 2019 (UTC)