Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2019/Abortion and emotion

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First of all, well done on all the research you have done! I think you have absolutely nailed it and it was really easy to follow and read. One possible suggestion: maybe a little more colour could really make your book chapter pop! Try inserting some more text boxes. You may prefer to keep it more sleek looking though, either way well done! Will be keeping an eye out for your video upload for the multimedia assignment. --Maddkilby (discuss • contribs) 12:40, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

This chapter has come together nicely and is both informative and well-structured. I added under see also the link to Wikipedia page of abortion so that people can view other resources --Haylzw (discuss • contribs) 04:52, 19 October 2019 (UTC)

Really great research done on this topic! It can be a very touchy subject and you have presented it really well! It may be beneficial to reference towards your images in your text, especially the first image you have. Great work! - U3160551

Hey, really great topic you've picked, lay out of the information is really clear and well structured, It would be really interesting to see some research on age and personality relative to the experience of medical abortions. I had a squiz and apparently SA is the only state in Australia where data, like age, on abortions is collected, as emotions/ emotional responses differ over the life span it would be good to see intergenerational comparisons in the experience. Is there any comparative studies of a younger and older cohort? are you able to contrast similar studies yourself? also really interested in how emotion around abortion differs cross culturally with the cross section of factors like religion. These aren't necessary to cover and you've put together some really good stuff, just food for thought :) Chelsey.mcnair (discuss • contribs) 05:14, 10 October 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I can see you haven't quite begun on your chapter yet. I think it would be really interesting if you did a section on whether having support while the mother gets the abortion impacts the emotions they have during and after the procedure. I've put a reference to a journal article which looked into that below.

Chor, J., Lyman, P., Tusken, M., Patel, A., & Gilliam, M. (2016). Women's experiences with doula support during first-trimester surgical abortion: A qualitative study. Contraception, 93(3), 244-248. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.contraception.2015.10.006

Kaylah-3163515 (discuss • contribs) 04:39, 26 August 2019 (UTC)

Hi, this topic is so interesting that made me want to contribute! It is true - that abortion influences emotions are a great deal, such as, when you look at it in a morality perspective of the culture. In the Philippines- where abortion is immoral - women who are pressured to keep the unwanted pregnancy due to Social expectation -such as college students who are pressured to either pursue the studies or keep the pregnancy, not to mention, Catholic school expel them when they are pregnant before graduating-- (You can read this article:

https://thesis.eur.nl › pub › Ato-Elvie-C._MA_2017_18_SPD.pdf ) these women are more suceptible with depression before and after the abortion -- because of all the factors that they have to consider before doing so.  There are meds which are illegally sold - Cytotec Oral - is the most common illegal drugs to assist them in doing abortion. I hope this helps! Glenda - 3165244

I found this article that may help as a starting for the long-term emotional effects. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC4496083/ --Haylzw (discuss • contribs) 05:45, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

I find this topic so interesting! Perhaps a section on the history of abortion would be important as the views on abortion have changed considerably in the last few decades, especially in western culture, and along with it the emotions people feel when approaching the situation. I can imagine young girls would have felt scared, pressured and perhaps ashamed in earlier times as abortion was a 'taboo' subject. There was also not as much medical or support services available, compared to now where there is walk in health/sex clinics in which provide support and information. Perhaps a comparison on the similarities and differences in emotional states when approaching this situation in the early 1950's to now would be fascinating as it shows how external factors such as societal norms strongly impact our emotions.

Good luck! This is a great topic!--U3175511 (discuss • contribs) 11:09, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

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Title and sub-title Excellent User page Created, with brief description about self Add link to book chapter Social contribution None summarised with links to evidence Section headings Basic, 2-level heading structure - could benefit from further development Avoid having sections with 1 sub-heading - use 0 or 2+ sub-headings. See earlier comment about Heading casing. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Avoid providing too much background information (e.g., proposed section on "Abortion"). Instead, briefly summarise generic concepts and provide internal wiki links to further information. Then the focus of most of the content can be on directly answering the core question(s) posed by the chapter sub-title. Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with relevant citations. Consider introducing a case study earlier (e.g., in the Overview) Perhaps consider the emotional impacts of legality I like that the chapter has a pragmatic/applied focus. But make sure to integrate use of some relevant emotion theory/ies. Consider embedding one quiz question per major section. Image Provided, with an APA style caption Cite each figure at least once in the main text. References Good. For full APA style: Use the new recommended format for dois (make the hyperlinks active) - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also None provided External links Good

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:52, 26 September 2019 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world phenomenon or problem. The Overview focuses on abortion - instead it should focus on the topic (abortion and emotion). For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags). Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is very well written. Conclusion - The final paragraphs is overly long - consider splitting. Layout The chapter is well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. See earlier comments about heading casing. Learning features Really excellent use of case studies or examples. Excellent use of interwiki links and embedded links to related book chapters. Embedding interwiki links links to related book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very good use of images. No use of tables. Excellent use of feature boxes. Excellent use of quizzes. Grammar is generally very good. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling is excellent. Proofreading is excellent. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style is very good. Citations are not in full APA style. For example: Important: Citations should be embedded within a sentence, not stand-alone. References are not in full APA style. For example: Check and correct use of capitalisation. Social contribution ~4 logged, useful, substantial, social contributions with direct links to evidence

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:40, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a very good presentation. This presentation makes effective use of simple tools. Structure and content Well selected content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured. Add and narrate an Overview slide (e.g., with focus questions), to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. Note misspelling of Bandura (~02:35) and need for ampersand or et al. for citations of three or more authors (e.g., ~02:40). There is a sudden end. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read. The visual communication could be improved by including some relevant images. Production quality Use the chapter title and sub-title are used in the video title - to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. The chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio recording quality was very good until it cut off suddenly at the end. Video recording quality was excellent. Image sources are provided. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to the book chapter is provided. A link from the book chapter is provided. A written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:41, 18 November 2019 (UTC)