Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Walking and emotion

Topic suggestion

Hey ! great book chapter, Have you ever heard of mindfulness walking ? I thought it might be useful to add it into your book chapter. Take a look at this starter reference https://link.springer.com/article/10.1007/s12671-016-0550-8 U3177123 (discuss • contribs) 21:51, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:06, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Wasn't included; now added User page Created, minimal Include link to the book chapter you are working on Social contribution None summarised on user page Section headings Insufficient development Key points Brief summaries of two articles are presented, but there is no overall plan of key points to be made within sections It is unclear what theory(ies) will be covered Overview - expand - important section. Focus questions - expand Can walking improve our emotions? - consider asking more open-ended questions e.g., "What effect does walking have on emotion?" (and why?) Grammar will need attention/checking before final submission Image OK Use APA style for captions Expand figure caption to explain how it relates to one or more key points in the text References Minimum of three references required for the topic development Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources See also - also link to relevant Wikipedia chapters External links - none provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:06, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Defining emotion

@U3093304: great to see the active development on this topic. A suggestion about the "Definition emotion" section: Basically, defining emotion isn't really necessary. Instead, provide a brief definition (e.g., in the Overview) and then link to dedicated resources about emotion, such as emotion (Wikiversity) and/or emotion (Wikipedia). This will free the chapter structure and content up to focus in on summarising the best available psychological theory and research about the topic, which is "How does walking affect emotion?" - doing so will do a better job of addressing the marking criteria than will provide definitional material about general concepts. In case this isn't obvious, consider that you are not currently planning to describe walking per se in much detail - instead, better to briefly describe it and link to walking (Wikipedia). Hope that makes sense. Let me know if I can do anything else. Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:42, 5 October 2018 (UTC)

Physical exercise chapters

@U3093304: if haven't already come across them, check out these other motivation and emotion physical exercise book chapters and consider where/how to integrate relevant links within the main text and/or in the See also section. Doing so would help to embed and intermesh these chapters, creating rich text. You can also add relevant links from these chapter to this walking and emotion chapter (which would count as social contributions). Sincerely, James. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:47, 5 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi there! Your chapter looks great! The pictures are appropriate and well-placed. The quiz questions are great! I love this topic, it's pretty interesting and relevant! One teeny tiny suggestion, for your 'see also' links, maybe try and give them a capital letter? Such a picky thing, I know! Good luck! --U3142860 (discuss • contribs) 03:47, 15 October 2018 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this a promising chapter that is currently more of an annotated bibliography or catalogue of relevant study summaries, but it doesn't adequately address theory or practical, take-away messages. The chapter could benefit from further development of the Overview (in particular) and Conclusion - it should be possible to only read these sections and get a good sense of why the topic is important and what is known/recommended. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Almost no systematic consideration of relevant emotion theory. Research Extensive summarising/catalogising of relevant theory, but lacking in connection to theory and critical synthesis. Written expression Written expression Avoid starting sentences with a citation unless the author is particularly pertinent. Instead, it is more interesting for the the content/key point to be communicated, with the citation included along the way or, more typically, in brackets at the end of the sentence. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview (in particular) and Conclusion. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Some use of Interwiki links (but don't italicise). Effective use and captioning of images. Figure 2 doesn't show anyone walking? Excellent use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. Avoid excessive use of italics. Use Australian spelling (e.g., hypothesize vs. hypothesise; behavior vs. behaviour).

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a reasonably good presentation. Structure and content Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section (particularly comments about lack of focus on theory). Drifts away somewhat from focus on walking and depression into walking and emotion. Otherwise, reasonably well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). The presentation could be strengthened by adding practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes effective use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. Well paced. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The presentation is slightly over the maximum time limit. The full chapter title and sub-title are used in the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the video title because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality is very good. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. Image copyright may have been violated - did you get permission to re-use? A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:25, 18 November 2018 (UTC)