Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Mindfulness and addiction

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Very good Social contribution Links don't go directly to evidence of contributions (it should be easy to see the changes you made at first glance, without any searching) See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings A reasonable 3-level structure is suggested - consider simplifying to a 2-level structure The initial top-level headings such as "What is addiction? "aren't really needed - cover these concepts briefly within the Overview or subsequent sections, with links to dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources for more info. This will allow the bulk of the structure to be focused on addressing the core topic (the chapter's sub-title). From a marking criteria point of view, the key section will be "How does mindfulness affect addiction?" - consider expanding this section. Key points Although several dot points are suggested, none seem to address the topic - what is the best available psychological science that can help to answer "How can mindfulness affect addiction?" Image OK Expand figure caption to explain how it relates to one or more key points in the text References Good Use APA style - e.g., no issue numbers for seriated journals For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources Use bullet points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:52, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Journal article suggestions

Hi Kartar,

I found some articles that weren't in your references and might be useful to integrate into your chapter. The first one is just a general overview of mindfulness meditation in relation to clinical applications (for addiction) in a historical context, another one about "mindfulness-based addiction treatment (MBAT)" for smokers, and the last one covers relapse prevention for alcoholism and substance abuse. Links: https://doi.org/10.1007/978-0-387-77725-2_13, https://doi.org/10.1037/ccp0000117, https://doi.org/10.1891/jcop.2005.19.3.211. Cheers! --U3122470 (discuss • contribs) 13:15, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this chapter... The Overview contains a lot about addiction, but not much about mindfulness or, most importantly, their relationship. This issue is also reflected in the main body. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory There is too much general theoretical material (the first half of the chapter!). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. Research There is relatively little review of research in general, or about how mindfulness can influence addiction in particular. Written expression Written expression Clarify of expression can be improved (e.g., opening sentence includes two " thought of"s. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Use default Wikiversity headings for sub-headings (that way the sub-headings will appear in the Contents). Learning features Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. Integrate links within the main body to other related book chapters. Basic use of images - can be improved by using the captions to connect more strongly to key points being made in the main body. Good use of tables - add APA style captions. Basic use of quizzes. Good use of case studies or examples. APA style Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct capitalisation.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon animation. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little, with Title, Overview, Body, and Conclusion. Excellent examples and practical implications. Theory is well explained. There is virtually no mention of research. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Well paced. Excellent pauses between sentences. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. Production quality Overall, excellent production. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 04:09, 18 November 2018 (UTC)