Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Gym and positive emotion

Interaction idea

Hey a suggestion to improve the interactive aspect of your book chapter, could be to include a quiz ? Even start a discussion and getting readers to think about what physical activity at the gym improves their emotions ? I thought this video could be engaging to add in, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Bzl3ldqg3NE U3177123 (discuss • contribs) 21:45, 18 October 2020 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:45, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Image captions

Hi Kristie, your chapter looks like its coming alone really well! I look forward to seeing the finished product. I just went in and fixed up your image captions, you forgot to italicise figure 1 and had labelled your second image as figure 1. Good luck with the rest of the assignment! --Brittany (u3117719) (discuss • contribs) 03:53, 21 October 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC OK Sub-title was incorrect - have fixed it User page Good Maybe also add a link to the book chapter you are working on Social contribution Link doesn't go directly to evidence of contribution See suggestions for how to record social contributions Section headings Basic See comment above about casing Bold removed - just use default heading styles Just deal with generic content such as "Emotional well-being" and "Theories of Emotion" briefly, linking out to other dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources for more info. This will allow the bulk of the chapter to concentrate on synthesising the best available psychological science that addresses the core topic. The key section that is most likely to address the book chapter requirements is "Gym attributions", although perhaps this could be renamed so that it is more clear what it is about. Key points Some useful, limited development Overview - Learning outcomes underdeveloped - worth getting these sorted before adding too much content because they are key - make sure they directly respond to the topic's sub-title question Conclusion - under-developed - this is arguably the single most important section Also see comments about section headings Image Use APA style for captions Expand figure caption to explain how it relates to one or more key points in the text References Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources See also - Good. Also link to relevant Wikipedia articles. External links - See external links for how to rename links. Also put details about the link in brackets afterwards.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:45, 1 October 2018 (UTC)

Hi, this looks like a super interesting topic and your quiz is great. It would be cool to see more information from the biological perspective of what happens when one attends the gym. Here is an article outlining some of this "Jade Teta, N. D., & Keoni Teta, N. D. Exercise is Medicine." It would also be great to see more examples of how going to the gym can improve known issues. I have found a link exploring gym activity and mental health "Callaghan, P. (2004). Exercise: a neglected intervention in mental health care?. Journal of psychiatric and mental health nursing, 11(4), 476-483." All the best, Chantelle (u3141099)--Chantellej 12 (discuss • contribs) 06:07, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Hello! I have two suggestions for this book chapter. The first suggestion is to create a heading such as 'Theories' or something along those lines, as your theories fall under your 'overview' category, which should be used simply to introduce your topics. My second suggestion is to stick to one form of writing "wellbeing" as you have written it both as "well-being" and as "wellbeing". Best wishes for your book chapter. --BB7897 (discuss • contribs) 22:40, 16 October 2018 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter that explains the positive emotional effects of gym participation. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory The generic theory about emotion doesn't achieve much - this could be summarised with links to more information. It isn't really integrated with the gym theory. Other relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained. Research Exercise, gym, ,and related relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory. Some statements are unreferenced (see the tags). Written expression Written expression Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-section. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Rename see also links to make them more user friendly Add bullet-points to external links Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project. Very basic use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of feature boxes. Basic use of quizzes. Good use of case studies or examples. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading. Check and make correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's). Use serial commas. Check and make correct use of affect vs. effect. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the tags). APA style Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text. Provide more detailed Figure captions to help connect the figure to the text. Citations In-text citations should be in alphabetical order. When there are three or more authors, subsequent citations should use et al. e.g., Smith, Bush and Western (2001) and thereafter cite Smith et al. (2001). A full stop is needed after "et al". Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. Check and make correct use of citations for sources with six or more authors. Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point). References use correct APA style.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion). Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Well paced. This helps the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. Production quality Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Add acknowledgement of image sources and their copyright. A copyright license for the presentation is not provided. A link to the book chapter is not provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:20, 18 November 2018 (UTC)