Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Dopamine and love

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback


Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Excellent

Social contribution

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  1. Good
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings

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  1. Reasonably good
  2. Some food for thought: The 2nd and 3rd top-level headings aren't really needed - consider covering these concepts briefly within the Overview or subsequent sections, with links to dedicated Wikiversity/Wikipedia resources for more info. This will allow the bulk of the structure to be focused on addressing the core topic (the chapter's sub-title) which is currently addressed in the 4th section. The could allow for some of the sub-sections in section 4 to move up one-level to become top-level headings.

Key points

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  1. Overall, well developed
  2. Overview - consider including examples or a case study
  3. Conclusion underdeveloped - what are the take-home messages?

Image

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  1. Very good
  2. Consider increasing the image size so that it is easier to view without manually zooming

References

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  1. Excellent
  2. For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html

Resources

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  1. Excellent
  2. External links - Include info about source/destination in brackets after the hyperlink - see example

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 07:25, 1 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Ted talk video

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Hello,

You have such an inherently interesting topic, great choice! This ted talk peaked my interest recently and it relates to your topic.

https://www.ted.com/talks/helen_fisher_studies_the_brain_in_love#t-244873

Helen Fisher explains how people in love show high activity in the ventral tegmental area (VTA). Researchers found particular activity in the A10 cells of the VTA, which are cells that make dopamine and "spray it" to many other brain regions. She explains that the VTA is part of the brains reward system, way below your cognitive thinking process, below emotions, and it is part of the reptilian brain associated with wanting, motivation, focus and craving. She also explains how she has always wondered why people fall in love with one person rather than another, and with the data of her study which she is currently undertaking, she predicts that the reasons are largely biological.

I hope this helped a little! Good luck!

--Ju3141393 (discusscontribs) 11:37, 11 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Social Contribution

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Hi there! i am enjoying this topic alot and you have a lot of great ideas! i think it would be really intersting to have a small focus on different types of love such as familial and romantic to see if that activates different brain areas! just an idea though and really interested in your content and the way you have written your chapter! Joog 17 (discusscontribs) 1:30, 21 October 2018 (UTC)


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent chapter that successfully uses psychological theory and research to help address a practical, real-world problem.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. Relevant theories are well selected, described, and explained.
  1. Basic but sufficient coverage of research involving the relation between the target constructs is provided.
  2. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory, with a critical perspective evident.
  1. Written expression
  2. Use gender-neutral language (e.g., mankind -> humankind).
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long (e.g., see Conclusion). Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion.
  3. Layout
    1. The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. However, I "demoted" the quiz headings to bold text; the quizzes are useful, but the headings were too dominant.
  4. Learning features
    1. Interwiki links are well used.
    2. Images, feature boxes, and quizzes are well used and integrated.
  5. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. Check and correct use of commas (e.g., use serial commas).
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
    3. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
  6. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Citations
      1. A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors.
      2. Select up to the top three citations per point (i.e., avoid citing four or more citations to support a single point).
    3. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Add spaces between author initials.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Canvas site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of Powtoon animation.
  1. Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little.
  2. Perhaps consider the Conclusion - could any practical, take-home messages be added?
  3. The presentation is well structured (Title, Overview, Body, Conclusion).
  1. The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to.
  1. Audio recording quality was a bit tinny - review microphone set up (I suspect on onboard microphone rather than a stand-alone microphone was used).
  2. Images sources and copyright is well acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:40, 12 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

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