Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Climate change and consumer behaviour motivation

Latest comment: 5 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:18, 19 September 2018 (UTC)Reply

Feedback

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Hi, I added to links to your external links section (Consumerism plays a huge role in climate change (Grist, article) and Earth Suffers as Consumerism Spreads (National Geographic, article)). I thought the articles might be relevant to your topic. Thanks, --U3154928 (discusscontribs) 11:46, 16 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

Hi, The topic could be extended a little bit more by taking into focus the behavioural responses that occur due to climate change https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/abs/pii/S0272494408000431. However, the content you have written so far , provides a fair understanding about the climate change and consumer behaviour.Best of Luck, --Dsaini3 (discusscontribs) 12:32 am, 22 October 2018 (UTC)


Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Excellent

User page

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  1. Good

Social contribution

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  1. Links don't go directly to evidence of contribution
  2. See suggestions for how to record social contributions

Section headings

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  1. Basic, 2-level structure suggested. Could be further developed to more closely/directly address the topic.
  2. For example, instead of generic sections such as "What is Motivation?" and "What is Consumer Behaviour?", just provide very brief summaries with links to dedicates Wikiversity/Wikipedia sources with more info. Then concentrate this chapter on the nexus - i.e., what motivates consumer behaviours which help mitigate climate change. In other words, don't beat around the bush; cut to the chase.
  3. Similarly, proposed theories appear to be discussed in isolation from the applied problem. Briefly introduce those theories, then spend most of the time examining their applicability to the specific problem.
  4. See earlier comments about heading casing.

Key points

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  1. Comments about section headings also apply here.
  2. Limited development of Overview and Conclusion - these are the most important sections.
  3. The key content that is likely to address the marking criteria is in the section: "Applications for Climate Change Mitigation" - so build and expand on this material.

Image

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  1. OK
  2. Use the captions to explain the connection between the image and key points being made in the chapter.

References

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  1. Extensive
  2. Merge reference lists and put in alphabetical order
  3. I've added some missing italics
  4. Use APA style

Resources

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  1. See also - Also link to related Wikiversity book chapters
  2. External links - None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:50, 1 October 2018 (UTC)Reply

New style for referencing DOIs

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Based on http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html, it is better to change the way of referencing the DOI's references.

  1. The volume should be erased and the number of volumes should be in italic.
  2. Instead of doi:, http://doi.org/ should be used.
  3. The name of the publisher also should be in italic.

I Have changed all DOIs references for you. 23:22, 20 Oct 2018 U31455


Chapter review and feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a solid chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits.
  1. There is too much general theoretical material (e.g., about climate change and consumer behaviour as separate construction). Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic.
  2. Some relevant social psychological theory is discussed.
  1. Relevant research is well reviewed and discussed in relation to theory.
  2. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. See earlier comments about heading casing.
    2. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-section at a level.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Embedding interwiki links links to other book chapters would help to integrate this chapter into the broader book project.
    3. Basic use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. No use of feature boxes.
    6. Basic use of quizzes.
    7. No use of case studies or examples.
  4. Grammar
    1. Check and make correct use of commas.
    2. Check and make correct use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's).
  5. Proofreading
    1. Remove unnecessary capitalisation
  6. APA style
    1. Use APA style for Figure captions. See example.
    2. Refer to each Table and each Figure at least once within the main text.
    3. Citations are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order.
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and make correct use of capitalisation.
      2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:25, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, sufficient presentation.
  1. Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section.
  2. There is probably too much content for an overview - be more selective, slow down, and provide more examples.
  3. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered.
  4. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  1. The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides with narrated audio.
  2. Consider slowing down and leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point.
  3. Consider using more intonation to add interest to the narration.
  4. Some of the font size should be larger to make it easier to read.
  1. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  2. There is some auditory distortion (the microphone may be too close).
  3. Images sources are acknowledged, but copyright licenses aren't.
  4. A copyright license for the presentation is provided (also change the meta-data).
  5. A link to and from the book chapter is provided.
  6. No written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:32, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Reply

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