Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2018/Anger evolution

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:39, 20 August 2018 (UTC)

Potential reference to look into

Hi there! I found a reference looking at how stress early in life can potentially affect aggressive behaviour later in life. The researchers used rats as a model and used MRI to look at the microstructure of the brain and what was affected. Here is the link to it if you were interested in looking at anger in as part of development, or looking at aggression in other mammals as part of the evolutionary perspective: https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/full/10.1111/ejn.14061?hootPostID=052c5f8b50f217c882a833c697aa7f13 Best of luck with your research! --YL Mariano (discuss • contribs) 01:53, 31 August 2018 (UTC)

Interesting research on related topic

Hi!! I was doing my research while somehow stumbled upon this paper that I think would be interesting for your topic. I think this could be used in creating the discussion around psychological implications of anger as a emotion and decision making. https://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/epdf/10.1002/bdm.515 Here's the APA reference for this article: Lerner, J. S., & Tiedens, L. Z. (2006). Portrait of the angry decision maker: How appraisal tendencies shape anger's influence on cognition. Journal of Behavioral Decision Making, 19, 115-1 37.

I also noticed that there are two "Overview" paragraph, maybe the second one could be called "Anger"? Good luck with your book chapter! --Kelly.ng988 (discuss • contribs) 03:04, 03 September 2018 (UTC)

Topic development feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC OK User page Excellent Social contribution Excellent Section headings Insufficient development at time of submission Avoid having sections with only one subsection - either have no subsections or two or more subsections Remove extra formatting from headings (e.g., italics) - just use default heading style See earlier comments about heading casing Key points Some development, but limited in part due to limited heading structure development at time of submission Conclusion is underdeveloped - this is the most important section Image None included References OK Use APA style For latest APA style recommended format for dois see http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2017/03/doi-display-guidelines-update-march-2017.html Resources Insufficient at time of submission External links - Include info about source/destination in brackets after the hyperlink - see example

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:44, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Comment

Hi, my topic is on the Autonomic Nervous System (ANS) and Emotion. Just had a thought on adding informtion on how anger changes the body physiologicaly might help expand on the information you already have. Where in the the sympathetic nervous system (part of the ANS), has a mass discharge, which means that there is an increase in heart rate, pupil dialation, changes to blood vessils, movement of blood away form the GI tract to the brain and muscles etc. In a full fight or flight response that prepares the body for action. This might be a nice addition to what you already have on how the nervous system stimulates the adrenal cortex to realise adrenaline and cortisol. Looks great so far, keep it up! --U3160678 (discuss • contribs) 02:30, 18 October 2018 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a problematic chapter mainly because it is largely about anger, in general, which was already covered by Motivation and emotion/Book/2011/Anger, rather than being more specifically about anger evolution, with integrated/embedded links where relevant to the pre-existing anger chapter. Overview - expand (e.g., consider building on the sub-title by establishing focus questions to help guide the reader and the chapter structure) Conclusion - expand - very weak For additional feedback, see comments below and these copyedits. Theory Overall, this chapter makes basic use of theory. Reasonable explanations of the function of anger. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources. Research Overall, this chapter provides a basic overview of relevant research. When describing important research findings, consider including a bit more detail about the methodology and indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Direct quotes should be embedded within sentences and paragraphs, rather than dumped holus-bolus. Even better, communicate the concept in your own words. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Use third person perspective, rather than first person (e.g., "we") or second person (e.g., "you") perspective. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Conclusion with synthesises theory and research in relation to the topic and the focus questions, with practical take-home self-help messages. Layout Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Learning features Adding interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive. No use of images, tables, or feature boxes. Grammar The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the tags). Proofreading More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style Direct quotes need page numbers. Citations are not in full APA style e.g., A serial comma is needed before "&" or "and" for citations involving three or more authors. References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and make correct use of capitalisation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:31, 2 December 2018 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, problematic presentation. The presentation is over the maximum time limit - everything beyond 3 mins was ignored for marking purposes. The Conclusion is weak - it (ironically) claims that anger is a learned behaviour - despite the topic being about the evolutionary aspects/role of/in anger Structure and content Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply to this section. Too much content - over time. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation makes basic use of text and image based slides with narrated audio. The font size is sufficiently large to make it easy to read in the time provided. The visual communication is effectively supplemented by images. Production quality The full chapter title and sub-title are used on the opening slide - this helps to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up. The presentation violates copyright by using images without permission - I recommend removing the presentation from youtube. Copyright was explained and discussed during tutorials. A copyright license for the presentation is provided. A brief written description of the presentation is provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:42, 2 December 2018 (UTC)