Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Smiling, laughter, and happiness

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Discussion

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Hey, you have chosen such an interesting topic, I had a read through your chapter and really like the information you have so fa, especially the section the on the brain and happiness ! I noticed that in your reference list some of your journal titles are not italicized, I didn't make a direct edit, thought i'd let you know in case when you copy pasted it the formatting removed. --U3119414 (discusscontribs) 12:18, 21 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thanks!! I had forgotten to check that my copy and pasting for references didn't translate for italics haha! --U3136850 (discusscontribs) 09:39, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hey! I have found an article on the library database that could be really helpful for your book chapter. It is titled 'Spreading joy: Examining the effects of smiling models on consumer joy and attitudes'. Here is the link: http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=5&sid=a22d7f4c-af48-422e-b788-b834adad8e0d%40sessionmgr102&bdata=#AN=2015-41845-006&db=psyh You will probably need to be logged on to the database to access this! The article examines the consumer response to smiling. More specifically it looks at the positive effects on attitudes and the effects on consumer joy that can be created by marketing agents. It is quite a clear and concise article and may be a good starting point for you. I hope it is of some help! --U3117399 (discusscontribs) 05:08, 20 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hey, thanks for this! Was an interesting read!--U3136850 (discusscontribs) 11:27, 24 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Subheadings

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Hey. It may be worth including a few different definitions of happiness at the beginning of your page. Here is a link to a journal article that might help you with this! http://web.a.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=3&sid=101618bd-b572-4ed9-80ed-2fae3d2e2b79%40sessionmgr4006&bdata=#AN=2017-34745-001&db=pdh --U3117399 (discusscontribs) 05:39, 20 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi, Thanks for sending me this link, were you able to remember the name of the article? The link wont open up the page unfortunately!--U3136850 (discusscontribs) 06:04, 23 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Ted Talks Video

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Hi there,

I often find that when starting an assignment on a particular topic, I gain a lot of ideas by watching educational videos such as Ted Talks. So, I thought I would provide you with one! This is called 'The Science of Happiness' and it largely examines the biology of happiness. I hope this helps in some way!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4q1dgn_C0AU

--U3141393 (discusscontribs) 13:47, 22 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi, thanks for this Ted talk it was really interesting! --U3136850 (discusscontribs) 11:04, 24 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Contagious Laughter

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Hey, here's an article with links to recent studies examining the neuroscience of contagious laughing. Interesting practical implications e.g. for boys at risk of psychopathy. --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 07:11, 1 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi, thanks for that, very interesting reading!!--U3136850 (discusscontribs) 03:55, 13 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:28, 15 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

 

Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Accurate title, correct casing
  2. Author name removed (authorship is as per page editing history)
  3. Image moved into main body (so that the title heading layout is the same for all book chapters)

User page

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  1. Created
  2. Used effectively

Social contribution

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  1. Excellent summaries
  2. As per author guidelines, more direct links can be provided to evidence - go to the page history, compare the versions before and after your contribution, and provide the link to this comparison

Section headings

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  1. Per earlier comment, use lower case for headings and normal font (remove bold)
  2. Overall, looks to be well-structured, with an appropriate number of top-level and sub-headings
  3. My main suggestion is to not to spend too long describing general/background concepts such as what happiness - provide a brief summary and link to more detailed information - so that the linkage between smiling, laughter and happiness can be focused on earlier and in more depth because this is the topic for this chapter
  4. A section should contain either 0 or 2+ sub-sections - avoid having sections which contain 1 sub-section.

Key points

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  1. Perhaps cover less content in the Overview - aim for a couple of paragraphs, perhaps culminating in some key focus questions that the chapter will address, possibly including an example or case study to help bring the topic to life. Shift additional more detailed material into subsequent sections.
  2. What are the main theory/ies? (not entirely clear/explicit)
  3. What is the main research evidence? (not entirely clear)

Image

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  1. Images are well selected and used
  2. Captions could be improved by more explicitly explaining the relationship between the image and the key point(s) in the text

References

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  1. Very good APA style - to improve, do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources

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  1. See also and External links have now been separated
  2. Add bullet points
  3. Include the source in brackets after the links

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:28, 15 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


Chapter review and feedback

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This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a reasonable good chapter which could be improved by providing less generic content and focusing more on the specific topic. Some more attention on the structure and proofreading to improve written expression could also help to improve the chapter.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.
  1. Overview is underdeveloped. The Conclusion could also be expanded to include practical, take-home messages.
  2. The Reeve (2015) textbook is overused as a citation - instead, utilise primary, peer-reviewed sources.
  3. Table 2 lacks specificity to the chapter topic.
  4. Abbreviate the general material about happiness and smiling as separate concepts and instead provide more detailed content about their relationship.
  5. Theories are happiness are well covered, but not closely related to smiling and laughter.
  6. Theory about smiling and laughter is well explained and utilised.
  1. Research about smiling and laughter is well covered, with relevant studies described in good detail.
  2. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  1. Written expression
    1. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion).
  2. Layout
    1. Some significant adjustment to heading levels have been added to better organise the chapter.
  3. Learning features
    1. Limited use is made of interwiki links.
    2. Images, table, and quiz are well used.
  4. Spelling, grammar and proofreading
    1. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
    2. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the [grammar?] tags
    3. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
  5. APA style
    1. Check and correct citations and referencing e.g,. Aristotle was not writing in 2000!
    2. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order
    3. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)
    4. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. See new doi format
      4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

 

Overall

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  1. Overall, ...
  1. Comments about the book chapter also apply to this section - basically, there is too much focus on theories of happiness, and not enough focus on the relationship between smiling, laughter, and happiness. The actual topic isn't addressed until the final 15 seconds!
  2. Narrate the Title slide, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  3. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages.
  1. Too much text, too little narration.
  2. Use images - e.g., to show the Duchenne marker.
  1. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up.
  2. Animated visuals are helpful; but include more topic-relevant images.
  3. Mute the music during narration to help the viewer concentrate on the combination of visual information and narrated audio.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 09:24, 28 November 2017 (UTC)Reply

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