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Consider adding/integrating a case study or some other examples
Overview
consider including focus questions - or explain the problem/question
at least briefly describe joy and link to relevant other resources
Use of wiki-link demonstrated
3 main theories selected - good - better to focus on a few than try to cover too many. But perhaps also make mentioned somewhere of Self-Determination Theory.
Conclusion - what are the practical, take-home messages/tips?
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Overall, this is a rather strange chapter. It does not directly and specifically provide a cogent summary of the best available psychological theory and research about the effect of joy and learning. There is a lot of tangential material and it remains how clear what is known in psychology about joy and learning.
Maybe provide an example or case study in the Overview to help illustrate how joy might affect learning.
The discussion of self determination theory and broaden-and-build theory seems to be only loosely connected to the chapter topic.
It is surprising that this chapter doesn't embed links to, and build on, the 2017 chapter about emotion and learning - have added it to the See also section.
The emotion of joy isn't defined.
It is not clear why this chapter focuses on technology-based learning, although this educational modality could be used as an example.
The "applications" need some introduction, explanation, and summary - why have they been selected and what do they illustrate about the relationship between joy and learning?
The Introduction was difficult to follow - it dives straight into discussing Huang (2011) without any explanatory context.
It is unclear how Table 2 helps to explain the relationship between joy and learning - explain.
What are the most important half-a-dozen research studies about the effect of joy on learning? It isn't clear that these have been identified and systematically reviewed within this chpater.
When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
Consider renaming "Introduction" to a more specifically named section that conveys information about the content to the reader.
Learning features
There are better interwiki links that could be used for SDT and its components, such as the Wikipedia article on this topic.
Perhaps some more concrete, simple examples of joy and learning could be added. Much of the description is quite abstract.
Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
Use Australian spelling - e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise
APA style
The Figures did not seem to be directly related to the topic - joy and learning. Provide captions that help to show the direct relevance of the image to the chapter topic.
Citations
When a citation has two authors, do not use a comma before the "and" or ampersand (&).
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