Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Homesickness

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Feedback

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Hi Jordan,

A quick bit of feedback for you. It may be worth linking relevant pages to your own here. In the current years pages there is Loneliness - What is loneliness, what does it matter, and how can it be managed? and also Culture shock - What is culture shock, what causes it, and what can be done about it?

Also for a potential case study, it may be worth having a look at this article which relates to homesickness for socially anxious first year university students - https://s3.amazonaws.com/academia.edu.documents/1895209/Urani__Miller__Johnson____Petzel__2003_.pdf?AWSAccessKeyId=AKIAIWOWYYGZ2Y53UL3A&Expires=1508675021&Signature=RGiE4v6ElYLLS3WkHRC2RYFUkx0%3D&response-content-disposition=inline%3B%20filename%3DUrani_M._A._Miller_S._A._Johnson_J._E._a.pdf

Best of luck for the remainder of your chapter! Ewan

Comment

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Hi,

An interesting article on homesickness and university students - risk/protective factors, prevention/treatment strategies Thurber, C. A. & Walton E. A. (2012). Homesickness and adjustment in university students. Journal of American College Health, 60, 415-419 --Mayoh 11 (discusscontribs) 03:20, 3 September 2017 (UTC)Reply


Hello, this sounds like a really interesting topic. I found an article that you might consider adding to the external links section as it included further information regarding some of the psychosomatic symptoms from a historical perspective. http://edition.cnn.com/2016/03/03/health/homesick-disease/index.htmlAnnetaJ (discusscontribs) 05:56, 21 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Homesickness in those with reverse culture shock

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Hi, I'm doing culture shock, and I can see you are looking at homesickness in relation to Culture shock (most my research has found this particularly occurs in the second stage of culture shock (Crisis/negotiation stage), eg which Winkelman, M. (1994). Cultural Shock and Adaptation. Journal Of Counseling & Development, 73(2), 121-126. mentions), but have you considered looking at homesickness in reverse culture shock too? Tohyama, N. (2008). Reverse culture shock and romantic relationships in college students reentering after study abroad (Doctoral dissertation, Bowling Green State University). (which you can find the full text through google scholar) mentions that those who have returned to their host country also felt homesickness for their overseas life. Might be worth a look into at the very least! EmmAnder18 -U3133718 (discusscontribs) 00:57, 4 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Theorectical Background

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Hey, this seems like a really interesting topic! Have you considered adding Bowlby and Ainsworth's Attachment theory to your theoretical background section? Could be really interesting! Hope this helps- goodluck! --U3117399 (discusscontribs) 02:33, 1 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:35, 9 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


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Title, sub-title, TOC

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  1. Very good
  2. The sub-title differed from the topic listed in the book table of contents - have adjusted to reflect the sub-title used in the chapter

User page

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  1. Created

Social contribution

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  1. 1 social contribution made, but no direct link to evidence of contribution provided - see guidelines

Section headings

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  1. Heading structure looks reasonably straightforward and effective
  2. Perhaps consider additional sub-headings
  3. See previous comment about capitalisation

Key points

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  1. Lack of sufficient detail in each section
  2. Consider including interactive material e.g., a case study that is integrated throughout
  3. Perhaps consider homesickness from an emotional point of view - what emotions are involved?
  4. Perhaps consider homesickness from a stage perspective - what stages are involved and how do emotions vary by stage?
  5. Consider the relation between homesickness and culture shock in more detail
  6. The earlier suggestion about reverse culture shock could also be useful addition
  7. Perhaps consider what is the opposite of homesickness? (Is there such a thing?)
  8. Practically, how can we buffer against homesickness?

Image

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  1. Provided, with good caption.
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References

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  1. Well presented
  2. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume
  3. dois can be presented as live hyperlinks - makes it quicker for the use to access the source

Resources

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  1. See also
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  2. External links
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-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:35, 9 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

History of Homesickness

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Hey! I found this Tedtalk about the history of homesickness which I found has useful information you could use or even include as an external resource A History of Homesickness: Susan Matt at TEDxWaterloo 2013

All the best! :) --Slucic94 (discusscontribs) 16:57, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter, with strong theory, good research, and an emphasis on practical take-home messages. The chapter is undermined by a lack of professionalism in the quality of written expression and lack of integration with the broader wiki environment and Motivation and Emotion book project.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.
  1. This chapter provides strong coverage of a wide range of relevant theory, with practical examples.
  2. Embed an interwiki link to the chapter about culture shock. Part of the book project is provide integration between relevant chapters, rather than stand-alone chapters.
  3. Refer to DSM-V rather than DSM-IV.
  1. This chapter provides good coverage of relevant research.
  2. Several statements are unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags
  3. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  4. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful.
  1. Written expression
    1. An abbreviation needs to be explained before being used (e.g., Homesickeness (HS)).
    2. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences.
  2. Layout
    1. Sections which include sub-sections should also include an introductory paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings.
  3. Learning features
    1. Adding more interwiki links for the first mention of key words would make the text more interactive.
    2. Effective use of figures, tables, quizzes, and practical solutions.
  4. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading.
    1. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    2. Spelling can be improved (e.g., see the [spelling?] tags).
    3. The grammar for some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
    4. Check and correct use of commas.
    5. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect.
  5. APA style
    1. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10).
    2. Use APA style for Figure and Table captions.
    3. Citations
    4. A comma is need before citing the year in parentheses.
    5. For a citation with two authors, separate the authors with and or an ampersand (inside parentheses) rather than a comma.
    6. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation.
      2. Check and correct italicisation.
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.


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Overall

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  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation.
  1. Well selected and structured content, but too much content overall because the presentation is over the maximum time limit.
  2. Narrate the Title and Sub-title, to help the viewer understanding the focus and goal of the presentation.
  3. What are the practical, take-home messages?
  4. Perhaps consider using more examples or a case study?
  5. Citations?
  1. Visuals rely on text; also consider using images.
  2. Avoid providing too much text
  3. Audio narration is easy to follow.
  1. The presentation is over the maximum time limit.
  2. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation.
  3. There is some background buzz/noise in the audio recording - check set-up.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:07, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

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