Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Gender and emotion

Comments

Hey,

I noticed you seem to be short on references specifically for your different theories of emotion. I've done a bit of digging and found a few basic starter references for you.

this one should give you a good middle point between the Jange and Bard theories. Plutchik, R. (1960)The multifactor-analytic theory of emotion, The Journal of Psychology. 50. P153-171

This one should help with the Lange theory Cannon, Walter B. (1927)The James-Lange theory of emotions: A critical examination and an alternative theory. The American Journal of Psychology 39(1) p106-124

I'll keep an eye out for more.

Good luck. Bee Taylor (discuss • contribs) 04:28, 12 October 2016 (UTC)

Hey Max

Pull your 9 iron out and get cracking!! Think about some of the different reactions you have seen from men and women to the same phenomena in the pro-shop. Weather, new equipment, whingeing about results or rules, 'problems with my short game'. Heaps of action research right in front of you!! Good luck with it.

KRD 1000 (discuss • contribs) 19:59, 30 September 2014 (UTC)KRD 1000KRD 1000 (discuss • contribs) 19:59, 30 September 2014 (UTC) (Kath Denmead, from somewhere in the northern Italian countryside)

Hey there, I was just having a scroll through your chapter and there is a lot of content. In some of the chapters from previous years they used tables and pictures to break up their content. Here's an example of one that was double starred:

https://en.wikiversity.org/wiki/Motivation_and_emotion/Book/2015/Leadership_motivation

goodluck --Muzz2016 (discuss • contribs) 12:18, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Heading style

Use default heading styles - remove bold, font change etc. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:54, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Australian spelling

Use Australian spelling e.g. rationalize -> rationalise. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:54, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:54, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Suggestion

Hey, enjoyed reading through our chapter and I think you have covered the literature well. I would only suggest to incorporate some pictures/boxes/quizzes etc to increase engagement with the reader and break up the sections. Best of luck with completing your chapter. --U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 03:14, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading style

Just use the default heading style so that there is consistency between chapters e.g., remove bold. -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:11, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Title formatting corrected Subtitle wording corrected Heading style needs correction - see previous feedback User page Created Used effectively Social contribution More than one type of contribution Twitter links were broken Moodle post worked - use editing tools to create active hyperlinks in Moodle posts Also try making contributions to book chapter talk pages Section headings As per previous feedback, remove bold and capitalisation Structure appears to be promising, however there is probably too much emphasis on explaining basic emotion theories (link to other book chapters and/or Wikipedia articles on these topics) and too little emphasis on the focus of this chapter - gender differences in emotion and the reasons for those differences e.g., neurological, physiological, cognitive etc. An alternative structure could be based around briefly considering gender differences with regard to each of the core emotions, with additional sections about gender differences for dynamics of emotion e.g., emotional stability, emotional regulation, etc. Key points See section heading comments Image Add APA style figure caption Doesn't seem to be related to gender and emotion References Good Correct capitalisation Use APA style italics Remove numbering Remove issue numbers for continuously number journals Use hanging indent template (added) Resources Use bullet-points Broken links provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 14:14, 7 September 2017 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi, Just a few comments: firstly, your images are numbered wrong, you start at 2 even though its your first image. Also, you should make them bigger so that we can actually see what the image is. You can do this by clicking on the image to edit it and going to the advance setting tab. Secondly, for wikiversity all the headings should be in lowercase. So your first letter of your first word would be capitalised but thats it (i got picked up on this in the feedback for the proposal) Thirdly, there seems to be a heavy focus on emotion and not a lot on gender. I realise that you haven't put all you're information in so that might not be the case, but if it is you should add more to the gender differences section. The emotions theories are really interesting though and are a good touch. Good luck, --U3115549 (discuss • contribs) 10:43, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Overall, this chapter does not provide a satisfactory summary of psychological theory and research about gender differences in emotion. Theory The Overview emphasises individual difference in the experience of emotion, but lacks emphasis on gender differences. For example, what is one example of a notable gender difference in the experience of emotion? The theories of emotion is section is very general - there is no mention of gender!? Similarly, the first half of the chapter provides generic description of some basic psychological theories about emotion with no mention of gender. . There is then a section about gender with no mention of emotion - . None of these sections address the topic for the chapter in any meaningful or substantial manner. Thus, the start of the chapter in terms of content that directly addresses the topic is the section "Gender differences in emotional regulation" (has been renamed). Even so, the discussion about gender differences is too generic and not sufficiently specific to emotion. There is no correspondence between the generic emotion theories and subsequent discussion of gender differences in the experience of emotion. Research This chapter is highly problematic is making bold claims about gender differences in emotional experience without citation to peer-reviewed sources. Thus, the chapter appears to be largely based on the author's opinion, rather than a close reading and critical summary of peer-reviewed psychological theory and research. See the tags. No indepth description of key research is provided - major reviews are readily available and should be considered and integrated e.g., http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1467-6494.1985.tb00361.x/full, https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3597769/ When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The quality of written expression is basic and reasonable. The phrase "In saying this," is over-used. The chapter could have benefited from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Learning features Good use is made of some learning features such as quizzes, although many of the quiz questions are not focused on the relationship between gender and emotion. User interwiki link style for links in the See also section Add interwiki links for key words in the body text to make the chapter more interactive. Spelling, grammar and proofreading More extensive proofreading is needed to bring this up to a professional standard. Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's Use Australian spelling e.g., hypothesize -> hypothesise The grammar for some sentences could be improved - see the tags See earlier comments about heading capitalisation APA style References Capitalisation needs checking and correction "Retrieved from date and location" is no longer used - just use "Retrieved from location" Remove issue numbers for continuously numbered journals Did you consult James (1894)? If not, don't cite. Direct quotes need page numbers. In-text citations should be in alphabetical order Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, ... Structure and content Many of the comments about the book chapter also apply here. Which parts of this presentation are based on psychological theory and research? Citations? The presentation fails to provide an effective summary of the psychological, academic, peer-reviewed literature on gender differences in emotion - instead, it seems to perpetuate gendered stereotypes about gender differences in emotion. Add and narrate an Overview slide, to help orientate the viewer about what will be covered. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication Some of the text is very difficult to read because it has been superimposed on images. The audio narration is generally clear and easy to follow. Production quality The presentation is well under the maximum time limit. Include the sub-title on the opening slide because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Add acknowledgement of each of image sources because this is one of the conditions of re-use for Creative Commons licensed images.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 13:05, 28 November 2017 (UTC)