Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Emotional resilience in space

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Layout and headings look good for you topic development. Your use of these sparks my interest for the topic. There seems to be a strong focus at the end on the implications for life on earth, and I wonder if such detail (assumed by subheadings) is necessary. Ems83

• Thanks for the thought Ems83! When listening to the first online tutorial, James mentioned that our chapters should be more bottom heavy (i.e. answering our subtitle question rather than defining our topic should be more of a focus). I will be sure, however, to still give earlier sections enough attention. Cheers! --U3154661 (discuss • contribs) 05:41, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

super interesting!

This is a really interesting topic, something you don't really think of unless you are in the situation. Thank you for commenting on my topic. I think that you will likely focus more on learnt resilience, rather than developed. It is something I will definitely mention in a brief section about learnt resilience in sentior positions such as CEO's, cheifs, etc.. [user: telgey|telgey] 17:09, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

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Hey U3154661, fascinating topic - you must be having fun researching it! Thought you might be interested in this article about providing mental health support to astronauts. My chapter is on awe and I'm hoping to include a bit about the overview effect which refers to the transformative effect of viewing earth from space - maybe you can incorporate it too, though I see you've already got a great structure and lots of research! All the best --u3122707 (discuss • contribs) 23:25, 19 September 2017 (UTC)

• Thanks for that article U3122707, I've read some journal articles by Kanas, he's definitely one of the go-to guys on the topic. Love the idea of incorporating the overview effect if I can, sounds interesting! Good luck with your article, I look forward to giving it a read! --U3154661 (discuss • contribs) 02:17, 13 October 2017 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Well done - link 1 is best because the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines. Use a numbered list Section headings Very good, question-driven heading structure, with meaningful sub-headings that suggests a good plan for the chapter Sections which include sub-sections should also include an overview paragraph (which doesn't need a separate heading) before branching into the sub-headings. Key points Key points are well-developed for most sections Move references to reference list and just include citations. Good to see that you have Suedfeld's work cited - work citing his work more heavily, although it may be somewhat dated now. Includes in-text interwiki links - do this for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies/future scenarios Image Excellent References Good. For full APA style: Use correct capitalisation Use correct italicisation Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources Good Provide more details about the source in brackets after the link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:40, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very good chapter - it directly addresses the topic using theory and research, with practical, take-home messages and examples. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Theories were well described, explained, and applied. It was helpful that extreme environments more generally were considered, as well as how resilience training might apply to every day life. Research Relevant research is reasonably well described. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags Written expression Written expression Overall, the chapter is reasonably well written. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion. Perhaps add clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Consider adding more links e.g., the movie Passengers is mentioned - how about linking to the trailer or IMDB listing or Wikipedia article about the movie? Note, with this example, probably worth highlighting that it is interpersonal stress that is probably Jim's primary stressor. Interwiki links are well used. Basic, but effective use of images. Good use of bullet points. No use of tables. No use of quizzes. Some good use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Semi-colons are overused where often colons should be used instead APA style Citations Check and correct formatting of et al. Multiple in-text citations should be in alphabetical order and separated by semi-colons Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. References are not in full APA style e.g., Page numbers are missing for many references. Check and correct capitalisation See new doi format Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. Engaging opening. Include citations. Includes take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Perhaps consider using more examples. A combination of text, images, and video are used. Some text was too small to read easily e.g., Conclusion slide. Well paced. Production quality The presentation is within the maximum time limit. Use the full chapter title and sub-title in the title of the video. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Very well acknowledged imaged sources and references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:09, 1 December 2017 (UTC)