Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Emotional intelligence neural correlates

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:11, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

The topic development has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Topic development marks will be available later via Moodle. Keep an eye on Announcements. Note that marks are based on what was available before the due date, whereas the comments may also be based on all material available at time of providing this feedback.

Title, sub-title, TOC Adjusted formatting and content of title and sub-title to match the book TOC User page Created Basic Social contribution Effective link No summary of contribution Use numbered list for contributions Section headings See earlier comment about heading casing Remove full-stops Generic, minimalist headings - doesn't indicate much understanding of the topic Key points Generic, minimalist key points - doesn't indicate much understanding of the topic No citations - doesn't suggest that much initial review of literature has been conductec Image An image provided with appropriate caption Image size has been increased to make it easier to read - consider for other images References Links provided, but not in APA style Resources See also 1 relevant link provided Search for other relevant past book chapters and Wikipedia pages External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 00:11, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

This chapter has been reviewed according to the marking criteria. Written feedback is provided below, plus there is a general feedback page. Please also check the chapter's page history to check for editing changes made whilst reviewing through the chapter. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below and/or contacting the reviewer. Chapter marks will be available later via Moodle, along with social contribution marks and feedback. Keep an eye on Announcements.

Overall Overall, this is a problematic chapter because it does not provide a sufficiently good summary of psychological theory and research about the topic. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Not much of the chapter directly addresses the topic (i.e., answers the question in the sub-title). By far the most important section of the chapter was called "Physiological activity". Basically, to improve this chapter, the rest of the content should be abbreviated, with links to further info, and the content in the "Physiological activity" should be significantly expanded. There is too much general theoretical material about EI. Instead, summarise and link to further information, to allow this chapter to focus on the specific topic. The chapter seems to confuse cognitive and neural. The chapter is about neural correlates of EI, not cognitive correlates of EI. Research Insufficient coverage is provided of research involving the relation between the target constructs. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression is below professional standard, with many errors. Once an abbreviation is established (e.g., EI), use it consistently afterwards. Some of the bullet-points should have been in full paragraph format. Learning features Embedding interwiki links would make the text more interactive. Use in-text interwiki links, rather than external links. No use of images. No use of tables. Basic use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the tags. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the tags. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard. APA style APA style is not correct for citations - e.g., A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors; in other places commas are used when they shouldn't be Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. et al. should have a full-stop References are not in full APA style e.g., Check and correct capitalisation Check and correct italicisation See new doi format Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Book chapter resubmission feedback

These changes were reviewed. Additional comments:

1. A very generic paragraph was added to the Overview - this has been removed. No improvements were made to the "problem statement" - i.e., Overview of what this chapter is about.
2. The quality of written expression was improved, including spelling and grammar.
3. The quality of material has improved, with clearer explanations.
4. The emphasis on relationship between EI and cognition remains.
5. There is some minor expansion of content about EI and neurology.
6. There was no improvements in critical thinking about research.
7. No examples were added.
8. No additional theory appears to have been included (e.g., no new citations added).
9. No additional research appears to have been included (e.g., no new citations added).
10. No additional learning features appear to have been included. For example, no links to relevant book chapters or Wikipedia articles were added.
11. No changes have been made to the formatting of references.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:30, 11 December 2017 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

The accompanying multimedia presentation has been marked according to the marking criteria. Marks are available via the unit's Moodle site. Written feedback is provided below, plus see the general feedback page. Responses to this feedback can be made by starting a new section below. If you would like further clarification about the marking or feedback, contact the unit convener.

Overall Overall, ... Structure and content Comments about the book chapter also apply here - particularly that only a small amount of what is presented directly relates to addressing the question. There may have been a misunderstanding of the term "neural" because many "cognitive" correlates with EI are described instead. Too much content is covered - the presentation runs over time. Well structured. What are the practical, take-home messages? Communication The presentation uses basic tools - text and narration. The text font size could be increased to make it easier to read. The narration is reasonably good. Consider using more examples. Consider including images. Production quality The presentation is over the maximum time limit. Use the full chapter title and sub-title on the opening slide and in the name of the video because this helps to match the book chapter and to clearly convey the purpose of the presentation. Audio and video recording quality was very good. Basic licensing info provided.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:36, 1 December 2017 (UTC)