Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Emotional expressiveness and gender

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Hi there, thought this may be of interest to you: http://www.gruberpeplab.com/teaching/psych131_summer2013/documents/Lecture5_KringGordon_1998_SexDifferencesEmotion.pdf it looks at sex difference in the expression, experience, and physiological response of emotions. This book https://books.google.com.au/books?hl=en&lr=&id=tS1C8Sl5ysEC&oi=fnd&pg=PR9&dq=gender+and+emotion+expression&ots=gjtosxqY49&sig=jOZl98zvrjdb3HEDUULIoVqzdLc#v=onepage&q=gender%20and%20emotion%20expression&f=false also looks at things from a social psychology standpoint, which may be of interest if you are looking at drawing upon a theoretical framework. Good luck! U3117451 (discuss • contribs) 02:31, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:40, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Topic development review and feedback

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Title, sub-title, TOC Correct title and sub-title Added template for multimedia Authorship is as per editing history (author statement has been removed) User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Well summarised contribution, but integrate the link to evidence and provide a more direct link - the best links go to direct evidence of the contributions made. View the page history, select the version of the page before and after your contributions, click compare, and then use this website address as a direct link to evidence for listing on your user page. For more info, see the book chapter author guidelines. Section headings See earlier comments about heading casing Simple, effective 2-level heading structure, with meaningful headings that directly relate to the core topic. However, it is not clear what the major theories about this topic will be (currently in intro to Emotional Expression and Gender Stereotypes, but perhaps warrant a more dedicated section(s) - remember theory is a third of the marking criteria). Key points Key points are well developed for each section, with some relevant citations. Research citations can be readily integrated into this structure along with examples/practical tips. For final chapter, include more in-text interwiki links for the first mention of key terms to relevant Wikipedia articles. Consider including more examples/case studies e.g., in the Overview to capture reader interest. Consider embedding quiz questions. Image One image embedded Consider increasing image size from default Consider enhancing figure captions to help connect the image more strongly to key points being made in the text References Good. For full APA style: Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Good Source added in brackets Add bullet points External links Very good Add bullet points

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 20:40, 16 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer comments=

Hi Ella, you have a lot of great information in this chapter and it appears to be coming together nicely! Some constructive criticism, if I can offer, would be to break the text up a little. Have you considered adding a quiz throughout or maybe even a table to break up some information and display in an easy to read format. This may be helpful to convey lots of information and provide examples in the Gender stereotype section. I hope this helps :) Karly --U3117418 (discuss • contribs) 08:01, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Chapter review and feedback

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Overall Hmmmm. Unfortunately this chapter becomes overly focused on arguing from a strong socio-cultural view that there the cause of gender differences in emotional expression is gender role stereotyping and enculturation. Instead, the chapter should simply summarise the best available psychological theory and research about the relationships between gender and emotional expressiveness as objectively as possible and let the readers make up their own mind about whether any differences and their causes are good, bad, or otherwise. Basically, there is no need to take an argumentative position, but there is a need to objectively summarise a specific body of academic literature. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory This chapter seems to assume that gender differences in emotional expression are due to cultural differences and seems to underplay the possibility that these differences could also be due to evolutionary and biological reasons. The chapter contains a lot of statements which are not supported by citations, so appear to be the opinion of the author. Preferably this book isn't based on author opinion, but instead offers a summary of the best academic psychological theory and research literature on specific topics. Minor point: Whilst is is good to respect diversity of sexual orientation, the inclusion of LGBTI isn't particularly relevant to the topic, which is about gender rather than sexual orientation. On the other hand, the inclusion of androgyny makes sense because it is about gender. Research A clear summary of the gender differences in emotional expression, based on empirical research, is not presented. There is a lack of description of relevant empirical research studies. Some statements were unreferenced - see the tags When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Greater emphasis on major reviews and meta-analyses would be helpful. Written expression Written expression Given the academic, objective nature of the chapter, avoid overly emotive, colloquial expression (e.g., "woefully short") A lot of the chapter is written in first and second person perspective (e.g., "we" and "you"/"your"). Whilst this is appropriate at times, it is overdone. Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. The chapter would benefit from a more developed Overview and Conclusion, with clearer focus question(s) (Overview) and take-home self-help message for each focus question (Conclusion). Layout The chapter could be improved by adopting a different set of headings which better reflected the psychological literature about the target topic. Learning features Some good use is made of Interwiki links. Minimal use of images. No use of tables. Some use of quizzes. No use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's Check and correct use of commas. The writing style in this chapter uses fairly long sentences. Commas were underutilised. Appropriate use would improve the sentence structure and readability. APA style Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10) Citations A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors References are not in full APA style e.g., Second initials appear to be missing, where available, for authors. Check and correct italicisation See new doi format

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but effective presentation. Structure and content Comments about the chapter also apply here - i.e., mainly that the topic may have been misinterpreted - the topic was meant to be about what is the relationship between G and EE, not what are the socio-cultural causes of differences in EE between Gs. The presentation seems to stop suddenly, without providing an effective summary/conclusion with practical take-home messages. Communication Audio narration could be improved by slowing down. Text-based slides with a few basic images are used for visual communication. Production quality Basic, but effective production. Audio seems cut off at the beginning? Sounds like audio may have been recorded with an on-board microphone, rather than a headset microphone (white noise/tinny/echoey) Hide the screencastify button at bottom of screen The presentation was shorter than the maximum, so could have been slowed down to be more effective. No acknowledgement of image sources.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 22:05, 24 November 2017 (UTC)