Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Emotional chills

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Jtneill in topic Multimedia feedback

Journal article edit

Hey, here's another journal article for your chapter:

Maruskin, L. A., Thrash, T. M., & Elliot, A. J. (2012). The chills as a psychological construct: content universe, factor structure, affective composition, elicitors, trait antecedents, and consequences. Journal of Personality and Social Psychology, 103, 135. http://dx.doi.org/10.1037/a0028117

All the best --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 03:40, 10 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hey, here's another brief article and a link to an interesting study examining brain differences in people who experience emotional chills in response to music --u3122707 (discusscontribs) 07:11, 12 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hi, I found a journal article that may help with your research. It investigates the brain structures involved with emotional chills using fMRI activation which may be interesting to discuss in your chapter. Hope you find it helpful, it seems like a really interesting topic! Here is the article: The Role of Left Hemispheric Structures for Emotional Processing as a Monitor of Bodily Reaction and Felt Chill – a Case-Control Functional Imaging Study --SL96 (discusscontribs) 06:39, 12 September 2017 (UTC)Reply

Hey, I found an interesting research article to assist you in research, its titled 'LISTENING TO MUSIC AS A RE-CREATIVE PROCESS: PHYSIOLOGICAL, PSYCHOLOGICAL, AND PSYCHOACOUSTICAL CORRELATES OF CHILLS AND STRONG EMOTIONS' hope this helps! --NHP96 (discusscontribs) 03:58, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

I also found another journal article that may be useful for your research, its titled 'Listening Between the Notes: Aesthetic Chills in Everyday Music Listening' --NHP96 (discusscontribs) 04:14, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Heading casing edit

 
FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use:

==Cats and dogs==

rather than

==Cats and Dogs==

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:25, 12 October 2017 (UTC)Reply


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Title, sub-title, TOC edit

  1. Excellent

User page edit

  1. Not created

Social contribution edit

  1. None logged on user page

Section headings edit

  1. A simple, top-level structure is provided
  2. Standard sections included
  3. Consider using a more fine-grained structure e.g., involving sub-headings for key sections
  4. See earlier comment about heading casing

Key points edit

  1. Some good awareness of the scope of relevant theory and research is evident
  2. Promising use of quiz questions as a form of interactivity (e.g., one key per major section can work well)
  3. Practical tips
  4. Add interwiki in-text links for key terms

Image edit

  1. An image used effectively with meaningful caption
  2. Consider increasing default image size

References edit

  1. Very good
  2. For full APA style, use italics
  3. Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html
  4. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume

Resources edit

  1. See also
    1. Rename the links (an example has been added)
  2. External links
    1. Rename the links (an example has been added)

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:25, 12 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Video links edit

Hey, ive noticed you have not done much so I have found so videos ive seen around the topic of goosebumps that might help you get started.

The Science of Goosebumps and Music Chills https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-EA2eWZuYDs

Why Do We Get Goosebumps? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MVnOBh9dTMA

The first one i found very informitive. You can do it! --Maddison Frost (discusscontribs) 11:40, 22 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Article that doesn't relate to music edit

Hi, noticed that a lot of the literature on emotional chills relates to music. Found this one on emotional responses (including emotional chills) to poetry and thought it might be something different you could look into to confirm theories behind emotional chills. https://academic.oup.com/scan/article/12/8/1229/3778354/The-emotional-power-of-poetry-neural-circuitry Goodluck! (CeridwenR (discusscontribs) 13:02, 22 October 2017 (UTC)).Reply


Multimedia feedback

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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation

Structure and content edit

  1. Consider using an example at the start, to engage viewer interest
  2. Consider including practical, take-home messages
  3. Reasonably good selection of material - i.e., not too little, not too much
  4. More examples would be helful

Communication edit

  1. Speak to the Title slide rather than just showing it
  2. Check and correct for unnecessary capitalisation
  3. Check and correct for spelling errors e.g., slide 2 - reate -> rate
  4. Goosetingles and Coldshivers table text was too small to easily read
  5. Consider using greater intonation for the voiceover to help engage listener interest
  6. The references were too small/fast - very difficult to read

Production quality edit

  1. No link to the presentation was provided from the Book Chapter - has now been added
  2. Use the Book Chapter Title and Sub-title on the title slide and as the name for the video
  3. Consider using a headset microphone - possibly an onboard microphone was used (e.g., keyboard clicks were audible)
  4. Copyright may have been violated - there was no acknowledgement of image sources  

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 23:02, 26 November 2017 (UTC)Reply


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Overall edit

  1. Overall, this is a promising chapter, with useful theoretical and research material, but is let down somewhat by a lack of professional polish with regard to spelling, grammar, proofreading, and effective utilisation of the wiki environment.
  2. For additional feedback, see these copyedits.

Theory edit

  1. Theories were well described and explained and appropriate focused on addressing the topic.
  2. More examples could be helpful.

Research edit

  1. Very good coverage of relevant research is provided.
  2. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship.
  3. Some statements were unreferenced - see the [factual?] tags

Written expression edit

  1. Written expression
    1. Some paragraphs are overly long. Each paragraph should communicate one key idea in three to five sentences.
    2. The Conclusion is excellent.
    3. Consider adding practical, take-home messages.
  2. Layout
    1. Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections.
    2. See earlier comments about heading casing
  3. Learning features
  4. Add interwiki in-text links for key terms
    1. Use in-text interwiki links for Wikipedia articles, rather than external links.
    2. Embed links to related chapters (e.g., about awe)
    3. Minimal use of images.
    4. No use of tables.
    5. Basic use of quizzes.
    6. No use of case studies.
  5. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading
    1. Check and correct overcapitalisation (e.g., "Kurt Goldstein, a German Neurologist and Psychiatrist" -> "Kurt Goldstein, a German neurologist and psychiatrist"
    2. Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's
    3. Check and correct use of commas.
    4. Check and correct overuse of abbreviations - only use for very frequently used terms within the chapter, otherwise spell out.
    5. Spelling can be improved - e.g., see the [spelling?] tags.
    6. The grammar for some sentences could be improved - e.g., see the [grammar?] tags.
    7. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard.
    8. Check and correct use of affect vs. effect
  6. APA style
    1. Citations
      1. A comma is needed before "&" for citations involving three or more authors
    2. References are not in full APA style e.g.,
      1. Check and correct capitalisation
      2. Check and correct italicisation
      3. Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

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