Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Dementia and vocally disruptive behaviour

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Keen to read more about this topic, I've got a lot of friends working in nursing who have said it can be really difficult working with people who have dementia, especially in terms of providing them medical care whilst remaining patient with having to be constantly repetitive. I've got some friends also whose grandparents are pretty much gone and don't remember anyone anymore, so reading about this will be really enlightening. Here's hoping we get more support for dementia patients in the future. :) Watching your page!--Taylormeggles (discuss • contribs) 05:04, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Im very excited to be following this page as this is a topic that interests me greatly. Im working on Elder Abuse Motivation and I feel there may be some subtle overlapping themes between the two. Im particularly interested in your 'Ways to manage vocally disruptive behaviour in people with dementia' section and where you reference studies using music. I watched a documentary recently where music therapy was being implemented in nursing homes and retirement villages as a means of providing individuals with a stimulating activity, providing both joy and a decrease in some dementia related symptoms. Although it isn't a study in itself, this article gives a review of the available evidence for the cognitive effect/benefits of music and I thought it may be of some use to you in this particular area. All the best with your chapter! Title: Music and dementia Authors: Balakrishnan R Nair,1 William Browne,2 John Marley,3 Christian Heim4 DOI: https://doi.org/10.2147/DNND.S35762 --U3100384 (discuss • contribs) 01:52, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

Formatting

Hi I really like your page and the way its set out! Just wondering that in the "see also" part that to make it look a little neater you could write "Motivation and emotion 2010 chapter" etc, and hyperlink that, rather than just pasting the link itself. I also loved that you had a video in your page!!--U3136850 (discuss • contribs) 09:45, 22 October 2017 (UTC) Hello again just adding another link for you, I don't know if you already have it but it was interesting for both my page and yours as its about dementia and the application of laughter as a therapy. https://bmccomplementalternmed.biomedcentral.com/articles/10.1186/1472-6882-10-28 --U3136850 (discuss • contribs) 10:25, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Excellent User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Excellent Section headings Excellent Key points Generally very good Remove generic example content Image Included Size and caption formatting adjusted References Very good Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within a volume Resources See also Rename the links External links None provided

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:46, 6 October 2017 (UTC)

Direct Edits

Hi, I made some direct edits to your page. You will be able to see them in the 'view history' tab of your page but this is what I did. Minor direct edits to sentences for spelling and clarification. Readjustment and resizing of images/videos to make the page more appealing. At least six direct links to other chapters and wikipedia pages that would aid clarification of certain topics (i.e. the types of dementia). Captioned the video in the "What is dementia?" section (a reference in this caption is needed). I think that is everything I did. One thing I noticed with your chapter, and I know you are probably working on it, but there are sentences which require references and none are provided. The main one I am referring to is the top "putting dementia into perspective". Where did you get these facts? A reference is definitely needed here (don't want you to lose potential marks for something so small). Perhaps (also) add a "see also" link to the report/article/whatever for interested parties who want to know more about these stats. So far, great looking information. Some layout and presentation work could be done but if you're happy, I'm happy. I'm unsure whether your "biological basis" section is complete, so I recommend giving that a quick look over. Great inclusion of an interactive quiz component. Good job.--U3117126 (discuss • contribs) 10:41, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

Hello, I found your book chapter to be very interesting, being psychology students we are somewhat aware of dementia and its affects, however you have covered the topic in a very insightful way. The chapter also flows well and looks very interesting, good job! u3141330 (User: U3141330} 22:20 3rd September 2017G(discuss)contribs)

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Overall Overall, this is a very strong chapter that is somewhat undermined by needing more professional proofreading. For additional feedback, see these copyedits. Theory Theories were well described and explained. Research Research is well reviewed and integrated. When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned" Write for an international, not just Australian audience. Australians only make up 0.33% of the world human population. The chapter benefited from a well developed Overview and Conclusion, with clear focus question(s) and take-home messages. Layout Avoid having sections with only one sub-sections. The chapter was well structured, with major sections using sub-sections. Learning features Some Interwiki links are used. Adding interwiki links would make the text more interactive. Effective use of images. Basic use of feature boxes. Good use of quizzes. Some use of case studies. Spelling, grammar, and proofreading Semi-colons are over-used. More commas could be used. More proofreading is needed to fix typos and bring the quality of written expression closer to a professional standard (e.g., include a space after punctuation marks such as commas, semi-colons, and full-stops). Check and correct use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's APA style Check and correct use of APA style for direct quotes. Check and correct use of full-stop after et al. References are not in full APA style e.g., See new doi format Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes.

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is an excellent presentation that makes effective use of powtoon. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. Excellent Overview and case study example. The presentation could be strengthened by adding a Conclusion slide with practical, take-home messages. Communication The presentation is fun, easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Consider leaving longer pauses between sentences. This can help the viewer to cognitively digest the information that has just been presented before moving on to the next point. Well prepared animated visuals and text. Production quality Audio and video recording quality was very good, although keyboard clicks are audible between slides. Copyright is well acknowledged.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:39, 29 November 2017 (UTC)