Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2017/Anxiety and gender

Articles

Hi, I am doing my book chapter on Stigma and emotion and I have a topic on mental health disorders. I have also found a fair few articles related to Gender and mental illness. I thought this may be helpful.

-Gender and Mental Illness Stigma: The Relative Impact of Stereotypical Masculinity and Gender Atypicality by Guy A. Boysen and Mariah Logan 
-Referring Men to Seek Help: The Influence of Gender Role Conflict and Stigma by Joseph H. Hammer and Teresa M. Downing-Matibag

I found them on the library website in the psychology database, so hopefully you can find them and they are of some use. Eva.--EvaSutton (discuss • contribs) 03:44, 31 August 2017 (UTC)

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FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 01:06, 1 September 2017 (UTC)

Article Suggestion

Hey! I am doing Separation Anxiety as my topic for the assignment so I found your page really interesting. Have a look at this article- I think it might really help you with expanding on some of your dot points. https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pmc/articles/PMC3135672/ Goodluck! --U3117399 (discuss • contribs) 02:45, 1 October 2017 (UTC)

Figure suggestion

Hi there, really interesting topic and book chapter which is well-set out! However the first thing that jumped out to me is that your image for Article 2 (the gender diagram showing differences in where their heart is) isn't that appropriate or relevant to the topic. A better idea could be to just include an image portraying an emotional woman to display that women are often considered to be more emotional. You could find a historical depiction of a woman with hysteria, or a more general image of a distressed woman such as this one.--Taylormeggles (discuss • contribs) 07:08, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

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Title, sub-title, TOC Very good; minor changes made to capitalisation and removal of author name (author is indicated in the editing history and the Book table of contents) User page Created Used effectively Social contribution Overall, well done A more direct link to the Wikiversity contributions could be provided (see guidelines) Direct link to Moodle contribution provided Section headings Very thorough; appropriately detailed Key points Generally very good, just watch out for providing too much general material and insufficient material that focuses specifically on the question/topic e.g., Overview - defining emotion is probably too generic - focus in on anxiety and then only briefly in a general way - link out to other relevant sources and the focus on the question of gender differences in the experience of anxiety, reasons why, and what can be done - i.e., practical suggestions based on theory and research Image Well used Suggest increasing their size Consider providing more detailed captions to help match the content in the corresponding section References Excellent Use the new recommended format for dois - http://blog.apastyle.org/apastyle/2014/07/how-to-use-the-new-doi-format-in-apa-style.html Resources See also Excellent External links Very good Include the source/author in brackets after the link

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 02:56, 10 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi, I think your overall ideas are really well but the way you have structured your layout is a bit confusing You should consider making your sections smaller if that makes sense? So for your gender and experiencing emotion section I would break it down into three sections: the first being gender differences in emotion, the second being theories surrounding gender and emotion and the third being stereotypes. I dont know if you've already done this in your word document but if not you should go through the whole thing and rearrange your sections. I also think that the normal vs abnormal anxiety box should be under you anxiety section, maybe just after you explain what anxiety is. I think its a good idea to have it as a lot of people dont know or understand the difference, but you should think about putting it somewhere else as it doesn't really work where it is I think the theories you want to use are fine, but maybe focus on only a few important ones so that you are able to delve deeper into them instead of just giving surface answers to a lot of them. Hope this helps --U3115549 (discuss • contribs) 02:12, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Overall feedback

Hi Tahlia, I have had a look over your chapter and it appears to be coming together well! I am unsure if you are happy for live edits so I thought I would leave comments instead. A few grammatical comments - I would steer clear of starting a sentence with 'however', I would only use it as a conjunction for sentences. For example in 'what is anxiety' the third paragraph would read better as "Anxiety responses can become disproportionate.." or "Anxiety responses can however become disproportionate..." if you want to demonstrate the contrast from 'normal' anxiety. Also, in the second paragraph of 'what is anxiety' I think it would read better if you started the sentence with "Although anxiety is a negative emotion, it is useful...".

I like the incorporation of the text boxes, have you considered adding an example for 'abnormal anxiety' in the 'consider this' box, I think it looks a little unbalanced not having one there at the moment. I understand you are still completing your chapter and it is looking really good yet I note that you are focusing on male vs female, have you considered including a section on transgender? I found an interesting article on transgender children mental health whereby there was a 'high rate' of anxiety recorded in the children (http://pediatrics.aappublications.org/content/early/2016/02/24/peds.2015-3223). You may be able to make some comments on the bio-psycho-social model re transgender.

If you are running short for words at the end you may be able to condense the 'what is anxiety' section to allow for a primary focus on the gender differences by summarising and providing links to other sites where there reader can go for more information. The use of a table to demonstrate the different disorders is a good use of space to covey bulk information clearly.

Overall well done and good luck! Karly --U3117418 (discuss • contribs) 05:27, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a very well prepared and well-rounded chapter that makes effective use of the wiki environment and addresses the topic. Theory Theories are well described and explained. Research Research is well cited and used. What is are the worldwide anxiety disorder prevalence rates for males and females? When describing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression The chapter is well structured and written, with only minor errors. Write for an international, than Australian, audience. The chapter has a well developed Overview and Conclusion. Avoid directional referencing e.g., "As previously mentioned" Learning features The chapter makes very good use of learning features such as interwiki links would make the text more interactive, tables, figures, and quizzes. Spelling, grammar and proofreading is very good Check use of ownership apostrophes e.g., individuals -> individual's APA style Table captions should have the first letters capitalised References - Do not include issue numbers for journals which are continuously numbered within volumes Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets. Direct quotes need page numbers.

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Overall Overall, this is a well prepared and executed presentation which does an excellent job of conveying theory and research about an applied topic. Structure and content Well selected and structured content - not too much or too little. Makes effective use of an Overview, Body, and Conclusion. Communication The presentation is easy to follow, and interesting to watch and listen to. Effective use is made of text, images, and narrated audio. Production quality The full chapter title and sub-title is used on the opening slide, narrated, and in the name of the video. Very good use is made of the description field. Audio and video recording quality was excellent. Audio recording quality was a bit quiet - review microphone set up. Excellent acknowledgement of image sources and software used to create presentation.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:36, 28 November 2017 (UTC)

super interesting topic! I've always been interested to know whether how we are socialized regarding gender impacts how susceptible we are to mental disorders, especially anxiety. --Natsta19 (discuss • contribs) 15:48, 24 August 2023 (UTC)