Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Terror

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Hey, In response to your post on moodle, I have attached a few different Journal articles that may be of assistance. The first discusses the role of the Amygdala in the processing and induction of fear related responses, supporting this with evidence of no fear response shown in an individual with lesions present on the amygdala. The second article proposes that perception should be included into the well established fear response construct (subjective affect, physiology, cognition, and behavior) as was shown by the results of their research into the fear of heights. Finally talks about perception of time whilst in a fear state, with results showing participants had a distorted view of time elapsing whilst in the heightened emotional state. Hopefully these articles can be of some assistance and best of luck with your chapter. http://ac.els-cdn.com/S0960982210015083/1-s2.0-S0960982210015083-main.pdf?_tid=6104bef8-9556-11e6-ae8e-00000aacb360&acdnat=1476811070_cae366108b084f9232bbb10903b743f7 http://psycnet.apa.org/journals/emo/8/2/296/ http://ac.els-cdn.com/S0376635710002615/1-s2.0-S0376635710002615-main.pdf?_tid=d817dd44-9557-11e6-a21c-00000aab0f01&acdnat=1476811700_9becd43242fed3a13f66fdc4da8fc8b4--U3090066 (discuss • contribs) 17:27, 18 October 2016 (UTC)

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 11:51, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Conceptualisation of terror

Keep working to distinguish terror from fear - what do they have in common - and to what extent, and how, do they differ? -- Jtneill - Talk - c 12:28, 20 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

I left you a note on Moodle, in response to your query if you're trying to smash this out :-) TristanMM (discuss • contribs) 03:57, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi,

Just posting some feedback in response to your Moodle post :) You have an interesting topic! I have a few points which you may like to take into consideration.

• Maybe note the subjective nature of terror. Things that cause terror for some people may not for others
• It seems like terror seems to mostly occur when one's life is (often unavoidably) at risk. Maybe emphasise this more? Mortality salience is a topic you could consequently look into, as it has been associated with terror. This article examines ways to rationalise existential terror. This article talks about the dual process of terror management theory, as well as how existential terror can be managed.
• Terrorism is so named because acts of terror generally put people's lives at risk, thus inducing it.
• With your 9/11 example in the overview section, maybe consider emphasising how people would have initially felt fear, which would have turned to terror once they realised they were in an inescapable situation. You also mention how some people decided to "end the terror quickly" by falling to their deaths. Perhaps their terror had actually resolved to moments clarity upon realisation that they could either face a slow painful end, or a quick one?
• Given that terror can lead people to end their lives, maybe consider talking about this in the maladaptive section.

Good luck! :) --Qt3141 (discuss • contribs) 04:55, 23 October 2016 (UTC)

Feedback

Hi there,

I can see you're still in the process of fleshing out your article. I would consider doing the following:

• I think a centered picture after the quote at the beginning would be great. Possibly something Hitchcock related if there are any on Wikimedia commons.
• In the overview I'd emphasize why learning about terror is important. How does it affect us in our daily lives, and why would we need to learn about it and how to manage it?
• I'd move your "When terror becomes maladaptive" section to before "How to manage terror". To me it makes sense to answer WHY we would need to manage terror before exploring that.

I hope this helps! Good luck! U3108945, 23/10/2016

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Overall Overall, this is a solid chapter which could be improved by abbreviating some of the background material about fear to focus the chapter on terror and bring it within the maximum word count. The chapter is over the maximum word-count. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory Terror isn't specifically and clear defined - fear is well defined. Clarify the meaning of horror in relation to fear and terror. Clarify the distinction between fear, terror, and phobia - there seems to some conceptual conflation between phobia and terror in the chapter. Otherwise, a good range of theory is covered and discussed with examples and related research. Research Relevant research is reasonably well described. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. The Reeve (2015) textbook is over-used as a citation; preferably consult and cite primary, peer-reviewed sources. Written expression Written expression is generally good. Avoid colloquial and emotive language e.g., "the multitude of heinous and terrible people in the world". Avoid one sentence paragraphs. A paragraph should typically consist of three to five sentences. Some paragraphs are overly long. Paragraphs should communicate a single key idea, often in three to five sentences. Write in third person rather than first person (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our", "your" etc.). Structure and headings The chapter is well-structured, but each section should have some text before the sub-sections. Layout Tables and Figures should be referred to in the main text. Tables and/or Figures are used effectively. Integration with other chapters The chapter provides an excellent range of relevant links to other Wikiversity pages. Learning features Excellent use of interwiki links to other book chapters and to relevant Wikipedia articles. Quiz questions are used effectively to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour). APA style Check and correct the APA style for how to report numbers (Numbers under 10 should be written in words (e.g., five); numbers 10 and over should be written in numbers (e.g., 10)). The APA style for the reference list is very good; remove issue numbers for paginated journals.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 10:11, 13 November 2016 (UTC)

Multimedia feedback

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient presentation. Structure and content Overview Narrate title Goes straight into definition Add Overview slide Use the Overview to set up the problem to be solved (the question i.e., the subtitle for the book chapter). Tell the listener what they will find out about if they watch this presentation. Great Overview - sets up and establishes the problem and its importance in a clear and understandable way. Selection and organisation Basic coverage of theory and research. Include citations about evidence for claims. TMT is really about managing fear of death, so although it has terror in the title it is not necessarily a key theory Conclusion Add Conclusion slide summarising the take-home messages / key points. Communication Audio Hard to listen to - remove background music from main body (or at least reduce volume further) Audio is otherwise clear and well-paced. Good intonation. Image/Video Simple visuals consisting of text and some images. Production quality Overall, basic production. Meta-data Copyright license shown. Include the subtitle in the prezi title. A link is provided to the book chapter. Minimal but sufficient use of the Description field. Audio recording quality Poor due to volume of background music. Image/video recording quality Effective use of simple tools. Licensing A copyright license for the presentation is correctly shown in at least one location. Creative Commons. The copyright licenses and sources of the images are indicated.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 06:54, 21 November 2016 (UTC)