Talk:Motivation and emotion/Book/2016/Sexual motivation and narcissism

Heading casing

FYI, the convention on Wikiversity is for lower-cased headings. For example, use: ==Cats and dogs== rather than ==Cats and Dogs== -- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:56, 27 November 2016 (UTC)

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Overall Overall, this is a basic, but sufficient chapter. The chapter is well under the maximum word count. For more feedback see these copyedits and the comments below. Feel free to make ongoing changes to the chapter if you wish to address any of these comments or make other improvements. Theory The chapter is reasonably strong with regard to theoretical consideration of narcissism, although it struggles to address the relationship between narcissism and sexual motivation (focusing more, say, on NPD, attachment styles, and relationships). The chapter tend to focus on NPD as a type of disorder rather than on narcissism as a personality trait. The Conclusion offers a good summary but could be improved by providing some more concrete, take-home messages. Research Was the Freud (1914) source directly consulted? If not, don't cite it (or use a secondary citation). Some statements are unreferenced (e.g., see the tags) When describing important research studies, provide some indication of the nature of the method. When discussing important research findings, indicate the size of effects in addition to whether or not there was an effect or relationship. Written expression Written expression For academic writing in psychology, such as this book chapter, write in third person rather than first (e.g., avoid "I', "we", "our") or second (e.g., "you", "your" etc.) person perspective. The chapter somewhat addresses the topic and book theme but lacks practical take-home messages. Some clarification templates have been added to the page. Obtaining (earlier) comments on a chapter plan and/or chapter draft could have helped to improve the chapter. Structure and headings See earlier comments about heading casing Layout No images or tables were used. Integration with other chapters No integration with other chapters is evident. Learning features Add Interwiki links (to relevant Wikipedia articles) to make the text more interactive. Quiz questions could be used to encourage reader engagement. Spelling Spelling could be improved - see the tags. Grammar and proofreading Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals'). Check and correct consistency of capitalisation. APA style Check and correct the APA style formatting of in-text citations. Check and correct the use of "&" vs. "and" (Use ampersand (&) inside brackets and "and" outside brackets). The reference list is not in full APA style.

-- Jtneill - Talk - c 05:56, 27 November 2016 (UTC)