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Hi, this is a really great chapter on the addictive behaviours of phone use. The only small detail I would add would be to talk a little bit more about the driving accidents paragraph a bit more. I have found a great article that talks about the various factors regarding dialling and driving http://www.sciencedirect.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/science/article/pii/S0001457508001401. Hope you find this helpful! u31115009
Hi I have found a useful article which may help you to begin your chapter, it is titled: Evaluation of mobile phone addiction level and sleep quality in university students. The article will be a good source to start formulating the overview and definition headings of your chapter. It discusses that addiction is higher in specific groups of people such as those with a poor family income and those with type A personality. The article also discusses the impact addiction has on an individuals quality of sleep which would be an interesting area to include in your chapter. The article can be accessed through EBSCOhost on the university library website page. I hope you find this helpful, all the best! http://web.b.ebscohost.com.ezproxy.canberra.edu.au/ehost/detail/detail?vid=64&sid=bb733175-f514-4060-870e-f258f4ca7c78%40sessionmgr120&hid=115&bdata=#AN=94136832&db=a9h --LeoDean1993 (discuss • contribs) 07:53, 1 October 2016 (UTC)Reply
Hello! I have added some images, fixed your layout and general subheadings! I have also added the option to add some external links, for a wider breadth of information, for future improvement!
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Abbreviate historical information about mobile phones and link to relevant Wikipedia material for more information - that way, this chapter can focus on understanding mobile phone addiction.
The Overview implies that this chapter is to focus on risks of mobile phone usage - but this is not the topic - the topic is "What motivates addictive mobile phone use?"
Nomophobia appears to be conceptually conflated mobile phone addiction - these are related, but separate phenomenon. Link to more information about nomophobia - previous book chapter - Motivation and emotion/Book/2014/Nomophobia and emotion and build this chapter around understanding of mobile phone addiction.
No adequate understanding of addiction is communicated. To improve, summarise addiction motivation, linking to previous relevant chapters, and explain how this applies (or doesn't) to mobile phone use addiction.
Add Interwiki links (e.g., to relevant Wikipedia articles and other Wikiversity book chapters) to make the text more interactive.
Some links to Wikipedia and/or Wikiversity articles were added as external links - these should be changed to interwiki links.
Limited use of quiz questions. Question focuses on a somewhat tangential fact rather than a conceptual understanding of the topic and practical, take-home messages.
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Use Australian spelling (some general examples are hypothesize -> hypothesise; behavior -> behaviour).
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The grammar of some sentences could be improved (e.g., see the [grammar?] tags).
Check and correct the use of ownership apostrophes (e.g., individuals vs. individual's vs. individuals').
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